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orckiller
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0 posted 2001-05-10 03:30 PM



         warrior
as i look around
i see everyone
in there armor as i
with my sword and shield in hand
as i look forward
i see the sun
then i think
this battle may mean
the last of us all
but like the rest
i have faith
in my sword and partners
that we will preveil
over the rest


tell me what u think

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Allysa
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1 posted 2001-05-10 03:37 PM


~WELCOME TO PASSIONS~
                                                                                :smoking:                          

Everyone at Passions welcomes you!!!!!!
Anyways, about your poem. It's pretty good for a first post.  Is that the style you always use??? Can't wait to read more.
Hugs,
Allysa

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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with you
2 posted 2001-05-10 03:41 PM


Welcome!   Please check your email for a special greeting!    SEA
Allysa
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3 posted 2001-05-10 03:57 PM


okay, so one of my smilies didn't work. Sorry typo.  Here:     

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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4 posted 2001-05-10 03:59 PM


ummm...^LOL!!

and the poem was a great first post...hope to see more and welcome to passions

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 2001-05-10 05:37 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!  

I really hope you like it here and i look forward to reading more of your work so please keep em coming!! Welcome again  

Suga_Baby
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6 posted 2001-05-10 06:18 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!  

This is a good first post, hope you stick around!  

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-05-10 08:29 PM


Welcome to Passions
This first post of yours produced a stong image in my mind, nice job.  I hope to see more from you and I hope you enjoy it here.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

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viginia
8 posted 2001-05-11 08:27 AM


Welcome to Passions!!

this is a great first post, i really liked the style you used in this.  i know you're going to love it here at passions and i hope you stay around for a long time.  i look forward to reading lots more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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9 posted 2001-05-11 08:36 AM


Welcome to passions and a great first post looking forward to seeing more of your work.
Zu

" The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson

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knightlyshadows
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10 posted 2001-05-11 11:17 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS


great first post! keep em comins!!!!
tiff


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-11-2001).]

Allan Riverwood
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11 posted 2001-05-11 05:21 PM


I like the verticality of this poem, it made it flow well.  
I also like your screen name, it reminded me of Dungeons and Dragons, and in a way so did the poem.     I love writing with that sort of a theme to it.
Welcome to Passions in Poetry.  I hope you enjoy reading, replying and sharing with the rest of us here!  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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12 posted 2001-05-16 03:31 AM


Very well done. I enjoyed your first post.
I hope you enjoy your stay here in Passions and I am looking forward to reading more from you in the future.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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