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Tangerines Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 22Richmond, Virginia |
My tribute to all those years of Greek mythology. Critique? Please?
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
My friend Marsha calls me Circe!  I liked this very much!! SEA |
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artemis_selene Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 14virginia |
circe always had a kind of mystique about her; she was definitely one of the most interesting characters in the odyssey. i thought this was well done, especially "my nightmares are full of bristles, of rooting snouts and ivory tusks and fire and blood: ruin" [This message has been edited by artemis_selene (edited 05-10-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
how can i give a critique when its perfect on its own. beautiful job and keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohhhh I enjoyed this tons...whoa...Well one thing...in the beginning, you have this whole power deal, and it continues with that tone (from the way I interpreted it, anyway) throughout, but the I's aren't capitalized..I think if you want to create a better effect you should capitalize the I's. Just my little brain barely at work. ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
really wonderful imagery is my favorite thing to find in poetry and you create some incredibly beautiful images with this piece. this is wonderful writing, i really like this a lot. talk to you later, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
WOO! *mythology nut right here!* I really loved this piece. Circe was one of the most interesting characters in mythology, and this is a great description of her personality. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
wow that was great! me being a great fan of mythology would love to see you do one about the Harpies! look forward to the next enstalment! love,peace and eyeliner angel -x- |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
I LOVE your allusions. I, too, have suffered Greek Mythology and i think everyone should fall in love with it at some point. Like i said, terrific allusions; there's such richness here. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great work! Can't offer many critiques, but I do agree with Carly that you should capitalize the Is. I enjoyed this read, good use of imagery and description of events.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great! I really liked this one. You display raw talent here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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