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LoneWolf
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0 posted 2001-05-10 09:32 AM


"My Wish”

As I gaze up
I look within
To the stars above
I make my make a wish

I close my eyes
To open them and find
Every star at once
So my wish may come sooner in time

I wish upon then all
With same desire
For the one who fills my soul
And  fuels my hearts fires

My wish is simple
My wish is true
For you see my wish is
To be with you.


It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

[This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 05-10-2001).]

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-05-10 10:12 AM


Cute.     Brought a smile to my face.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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2 posted 2001-05-10 11:30 PM


really a very sweet poem
hope you do get your wish  
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

holatuwol
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3 posted 2001-05-11 01:04 AM


You know, there's no way for me to see a poem about wishing and not comment... well, there's also a rare occasion for me to see a poem about water and fail to comment, but I like commenting on wishful poems because there just aren't enough wishful people out there anymore... we need more wishful people! ^^

I like this poem!  hehehe  It's cute!  Very cute!  And it goes into the little library that I'm starting up... Yesh!  I love poems about wishes... it's an evil bias that I can't control, but I just love poems about wishes!!!  I would love to see more poems about wishes if you ever want to write any more.  *grins*

Once again, I adored the poem!  It was simple... it wasn't elegant or profound, but it is very cute, and that earns major bonus points. ^^v  We have so many deep emotional poems, but very few innocent poems that just make you starry-eyed and say that it's a cute poem!  hehehe!  I hope you don't take the word "cute" as some kind of insult or something... oO;

Anyways, once again, CUTE poem!  hehehe  If you write more, be sure to post it here!  I'd *love* to read it... *_*  I love poems about wishes... so so cute... hehehe  *wonders if all this drooling has scared people away into avoiding writing about wishes*  I hope not... *massive sweatdrop*


- holatuwol

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4 posted 2001-05-11 02:05 AM


this was a really sweet poem...i really enjoyed it...great poem...and keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 2001-05-11 10:19 AM


this is a really sweet poem, the last stanza especially is cute.  keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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6 posted 2001-05-12 10:14 PM


This is so sweet...i should really wish on stars more often...but n e way i really hope you get your wish!!!
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7 posted 2001-05-13 01:07 AM


yeah this is very cute   it put a smile on my face....more guys need to be like that!  hehe....cute poem.

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

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8 posted 2001-05-16 03:54 AM


Very well done on this poem. I enjoyed it greatly!
You seem to be in love! Look at all the love poems.....geesh.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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