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Linc

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since 2001-03-07

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The Backstreet Boy

0 posted 2001-05-09 05:34 PM

You make angels sing.
You are beautiful and true.
My one true love you.

Hey guys,

This is my first try at a senryu so tell me what you think. Now to the most important part of this post

besides the poem is that Marie or Fading Away has been put on punishment from the computer so she wont be on for about a month so don't think she has left or is just not reading your work. Okay then pass the word on for me cause I can't get it to everyone on teen poetry

talk to you later and hope you liked it.

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-09 05:40 PM

nooo.....marie

..imma miss her

ok...but on teh poem i thought it had some nice maning but the last line seemed little iffy..other then that..great job..keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

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On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2001-05-09 06:03 PM

"i like it, the rhyming is cool and i like the last line." That's what I said earlier, and that's what I think now

And thanks for the info on marie, I hope she makes it through the month all right.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

JBaker515

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since 2001-02-28

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Dartmouth College

3 posted 2001-05-09 06:07 PM

great poem..
marie will be back

...hopefully!

$ Jeff $ : )

"If I'm not back in 5 minutes......just wait longer!"

"You may take our lives, but you'll never take our FREEDOM!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-05-09 06:30 PM

This is a really good Senryu

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

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Fl

5 posted 2001-05-09 07:45 PM

This was very good. Keep writing!

Jenn

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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Winnipeg

6 posted 2001-05-09 09:26 PM

I already told you what I think of the senryu.
Tell Marie that I miss her and she's in my thoughts.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Allysa

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since 1999-11-09

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In an upside-down garden

7 posted 2001-05-10 08:31 AM

Great job Linc. If someone ever wrote me something like that, I would just melt. Unfortunatly, the only thing I could get that someone to write was a letter and that took a heck of a lot of bribery. ANyways, I'll miss Marie, even tho I don't really talk to her much. Byes.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

8 posted 2001-05-10 12:49 PM

two posts in the same week? what's going on here

i like the the rhyming in this piece, i think it adds an interesting twist to this format. i will miss marie on here but i still get to hear all of her poetry so y'all can just be jealous of me

keep posting regularly, i always enjoy your poetry and your replies. talk to you later

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

broken wing
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since 2001-04-30

Posts 37

9 posted 2001-05-11 12:41 PM

i dont know what a senryu is, but i enjoyed this.
broken

"To me, fair friend, u never can be old,
For as u were when first ur eye I eyed,
Such seems ur beauty still." ~W.S.

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

10 posted 2001-05-12 10:02 PM

Hey,

Thanks for the replies

and broken wing ask the senru master Allan Riverwood. Thakns again guy It means alot

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-05-15 03:31 PM

I enjoyed the senryu.....say hi to Marie.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

12 posted 2001-05-16 06:33 PM

Oh darnit!! This is why she didnt reply to my email. Thanks. And great job on the poem.

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

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