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Tangerines
Junior Member

since 2001-05-07

Posts 22
Richmond, Virginia

0 posted 2001-05-08 05:23 PM

everything screams to be touched.
the river, today, swift and indigo-blue;
and you, silvering into gray,
smashing me into china-plate slivers -
i've been here all along, waiting.
soft-petaled, unfolding, i'm flat on my back
pretending to fly, aching my way to sanity.
your hands, your white tears -
i'm filling up, overflowing,
spilling down and taking over your longing.
too young for anything else,
i'm wearing flower-print dresses,
dancing with you in my sleep,
gathering bunches of nettles and roses
until my hands bleed themselves pale -
and the whole time, we're turning luminous,
disintegrating, becoming transparent,
coating ourselves with light as we shrink and explode.

"I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

1 posted 2001-05-08 05:24 PM

Wow some great imagery within this piece. I enjoyed it alot.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-05-08 05:56 PM

this is really neat

SEA

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-08 06:05 PM

i really like this...nice imagery
*KiMMiE*

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-05-08 08:04 PM

Yeaowch..... very dark love poetry. I'm really enjoying reading such a theme lately in the forums.

I really love this one, it radiated power. Excellent work.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

5 posted 2001-05-09 09:47 AM

I've told you before that i love your writing, but after reading this it definetely needs to be said again. i loved the imagery and the power of this piece really held me spell bound. this is wonderful writing, keep posting and replying

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-05-09 09:48 AM

hee hee. i'm back. i meant to add this to my library the first time, so now i think i will.

ScarletPoetess
Junior Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 18

7 posted 2001-05-09 07:01 PM

Very nice work! I really enjoyed this. I thought your words are beautiful. Good work. I think this one's going into my library

Scarlet

I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-05-11 06:03 PM

as everyone already has said, great imagery. a little different kind of love poem though, but stilla g ood write. keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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9 posted 2001-05-11 08:39 PM

This is incredible! Straight to the library with it. Thanks for posting.

so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

10 posted 2001-05-16 03:23 PM

I love your poetry! You are such a great poet. I enjoyed reading this as I enjoyed reading all your work. I hope to read so much more from you. This poem was outstanding!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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