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Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2001-05-08 04:56 PM

I wish to kiss
Your luscious lips,

I wish to hold you in my arm,
Love you till the end of dawn,

I wish to tell you things
Seeing you the joy it brings,

I wish to see that smile,
Only for an eternal while,

I love the way you blush,
Setting my beat to a rush,

I wish to hold you in my heart,
Not only when we are apart.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-05-08 05:00 PM

very sweet

SEA

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-08 05:01 PM

i'm glad you are posting here...
cuz i really enjoyed this read..
i thought it was a great poem..
tahnks for sharing and keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

3 posted 2001-05-08 05:13 PM

Such simple wishes. I hope that they eventually come true 4 u..Good work.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

4 posted 2001-05-08 06:31 PM

wishing for someone to love...dont alotta ppl wish that..i know i do lol..nice job on this one. keep posting
*KiMMiE*

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-05-08 08:16 PM

Very nice poem... couplets are a good way to do a simple rhyme.

You did nicely.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

6 posted 2001-05-09 12:51 PM

I am overwhlemed by your responses my friend. I shall post here most often.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

7 posted 2001-05-09 10:03 AM

i hope you do post here more often, i really enjoyed reading this piece by you. the use of couplets is one of my favorite techniques and you did an excellent job with this style. i look forward to reading more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

ScarletPoetess
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since 2001-05-09

Posts 18

8 posted 2001-05-09 10:51 AM

I really like the couplets. They make the flow excellent, and make the piece more powerful. I liked this!

Scarlet

I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real.

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

9 posted 2001-05-09 11:01 AM

more love and romantic poems will be coming your way my friends.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

10 posted 2001-05-10 10:07 PM

This is so romantic...ahhhh beautiful

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

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Twilight Zone

11 posted 2001-05-13 04:25 PM

Such a sweet poem

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

12 posted 2001-05-13 10:06 PM

Thanks for your response acire.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

13 posted 2001-05-18 02:09 PM

I liked it, but I know i've seen better from you. You usually post in dark, i think....either that or corner, but i think it's dark.
Anyway....it was ok.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

14 posted 2001-05-18 06:30 PM

well dopey, you are right, but i thought i would try out the love part once in a while.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Xeonox

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since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

15 posted 2001-05-18 06:30 PM

well dopey, you are right, but i thought i would try out the love part once in a while.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

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