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vixengrl04
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0 posted 2001-05-08 04:35 PM


Every night on my pillow I lay,
I stare up to Heaven and silently pray.
Praying to God that things will improve,
and that He'll give me the strength that I need
to move.
That tomorrow will be a brand new day,
that my problems will disappear and it will all be okay.
Maybe He'll give me the motivation I need,
to conquer my fears and go on to succeed.
I open my eyes and gaze up above,
"Please God give me my own special love."
This pain in my heart
must be here to stay,
because every night
I still have to pray.
Does He hear my cries,
Does He know I exist?
Obviously not,
Cuz the pain still persists.
I need answers to guide me,
Need some help to set me free.
SO God if you hear me,
Is it too late?
I'm beginning to think
that this misery is my fate.
I need to escape or I'll fade away,
because I'm not sure if I can last one more day.
This is my last attempt:
So God...if you're there,
Please...answer my prayer.

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

© Copyright 2001 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-05-08 05:15 PM


hey..this poem was my life in that perspective..i totally enjoyed and related to this poem i have written a poem on the same topic...tahnks for sharing so i had some sad but reall memories of my lost prayers...keep writing

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)
2 posted 2001-05-08 06:01 PM


wow nik  that was soooo great!!!  i havent read that one!!  awsome job  i luv ya!
          *KiMMiE*

dramaqueen22086
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3 posted 2001-05-08 06:18 PM


yeah nikki thats really good, i loved it.
i haven't seen that one... is it new, well i just wanted to say i thought i was great.

Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-05-08 08:07 PM


This is really powerful..... very emotional, it put me in quite a compassionate mood.  Such powerful feelings of helplessness.... I really really enjoy this poem.  
I'd like to give you some advice, but maybe it would be best to keep it outside of the forum?  
Perhaps I'll talk to you later...
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?
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5 posted 2001-05-08 08:29 PM


wait..allan...is it cause its religion related?..tell me...that aint right?

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

vixengrl04
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6 posted 2001-05-08 08:57 PM


Hey guys thank you for the replies!! I really appreciate it!    
Allan, if you would like you can talk to me on AIM my sn is nikkigrl2004.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

banburycross
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viginia
7 posted 2001-05-09 10:28 AM


This pice is very heartfelt and beautifully written, i like it a lot.   you really captured a feeling of hoplessness and desperation in your words.  great job, keep posting your poetry.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

ScarletPoetess
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8 posted 2001-05-09 10:33 AM


This is a very good poem.  It's good to put things like this is God's hand.  Sometimes, He's the only one that can help.
You expressed your emotions tremendously well.  I can't wait to read more.

Scarlet

I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. I focus on the pain, the only thing that's real.

vixengrl04
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9 posted 2001-05-09 05:26 PM


Thanks, glad you liked it!  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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10 posted 2001-05-09 06:28 PM


This is really good.  I'm very impressed with this one.  Don't lose hope though.  have strong faith and you shall be rewarded.  Keep praying

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

Lakewalker
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11 posted 2001-05-09 07:45 PM


Excellent job of expressing your feelings in this poem!  I hope things can work out for you

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

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12 posted 2001-05-15 02:33 PM


I really felt you did exceptional on this one. I have asked God for a few things, but only when I'm really messed up. I hope all is well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)
13 posted 2001-05-15 03:05 PM


hey  library..oops
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