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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
hey people i wrote this a long time ago, when i was i think 12. i did it when i was really upset w/ one of my friends.... but i'm not like this anymore... i'm not alone i'm very happy.... I’m standing here w/ a group of people People I don’t know People I don’t understand People who just don’t care Care about life Care about friends Care about me Me a person alone Me a person to herself Me a person all alone All alone w/ no one there All alone w/ no one to protect me All lone by my self All alone |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey Kel. This is really good, I like the way you started each line with the word that ended the line before it. Creative, and good!!  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked it..but something was missing i dont know...but other then that i think you did a fine job...keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
see kel...you did lie to me..you write poetry... i liked it tho! good job *KiMMiE* |
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ezbc132 New Member
since 2001-05-08
Posts 3 |
This is good poem and i think you have a lot of talent. ezbc132 |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
His was very creative! I absolutely love the format you put to it... wow... and you were so young! Just brilliant! Such wonderful technique... I really admire this, you won quite a few points with me on this poem. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really love reading poetry that people wrote when they were very young, it always intrests me to watch people grow in their writing. i loves the format of this and i thought you did a great job on this. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im glad to hear that your not like this anymore but you did an excellent job getting the message across!! Im so glad to hear that your happy And i hope you stay that way! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hey, this is really a great expression of your inner feelings. DOn't forget that you have people around Passions to talk to if you need an ear "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I am also glad that you arent like this now. But it was a great poem all the same! *~*Amanda*~* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done. Glad yer not as lonely anymore. I liked this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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