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Godsend_1
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0 posted 2001-05-07 11:12 PM


Don’t tell them where I hide
Don’t tell them where I go
Just let me hide in this little cove
I just want die
I don’t want to breath
I don’t want to see
All the pain in me
Just let me hide
Escape this evil prize
Help me baby please
Help me

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

© Copyright 2001 Ben Redshaw - All Rights Reserved
sleepymoongirl
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1 posted 2001-05-07 11:22 PM


hey as u know i'm more then happy to listen to u ben and u better not die dork butt talk latterz okie from me scarlet

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

knightlyshadows
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obscured vision
2 posted 2001-05-07 11:32 PM


*hugs* i love you ben

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-05-07 11:48 PM


*group hugs*  I love all of you.  
(is trying to make up for Javier's absence)

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

banburycross
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viginia
4 posted 2001-05-08 12:50 PM


This is incredible, the emotion in this piece is really breathtaking, i like this piece a lot.  group hugs are the best, i'm joining in    great job on this, keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

5_sweet_kisses
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5 posted 2001-05-08 01:46 PM


that was great ben.. *hugs*
AngelPoet87
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Indy
6 posted 2001-05-08 06:24 PM


Love you Ben, keep your head up hun. *hugs forever*
lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)
7 posted 2001-05-08 06:28 PM


i know that feeling all to weel..just think of the good things ya have..even if thjere arnt many,...they are still thnere..and those r the things that matter!!!
         *KiMMiE*

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8 posted 2001-05-15 03:24 AM


Sounds like a cry for help. I hope everything is ok Ben....You can talk to me if you'd like  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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9 posted 2001-05-15 08:53 PM


I just want die
I don’t want to breath
I don’t want to see
All the pain in me

I thought those for lines were incredibly strong but yet so wonderfully expressed. ::Hugs:: hun...stay strong

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10 posted 2001-05-30 06:53 PM


Hang in there
be strong my friend
just remember, we'll always be here for ya

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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