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Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

0 posted 2001-05-07 09:26 PM

As we stand by the sea
your beautiful smile turns so bright
You are sweet as you can be
It looks like a heavens light
Every time there is a storm
As the sun starts to fade
You hold me to keep me worm
All there is is a big old shade
Our love was so bright
All i thought about was not being alone
But now it's nothing but a little light
Now I forgot the sound of your tone
As our love starts to die
It is time to say good bye

Hi I know it's been along time sence i have posted and i would like to say welcome to all the new people. I wrote this in english class and i would like to hear what you think about this. Thank you.
Lovely_Kris

[This message has been edited by Lovely_Kris (edited 05-07-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-07 11:00 PM

well...welcome back...
i liked this
esp these lines..
"As our love starts to die
It is time to say good bye"
those lines were so real to me
keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-05-07 11:21 PM

Good work on the poem! I think you'll find a lot has changed in PIP since last you were here, I hope you do feel welcome to rejoin us in our family.
Oh and thanks for the welcome.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

3 posted 2001-05-08 07:51 PM

Thanks so much for your reply's and i will make every effort to read yours. Thanks again.
Lovely_Kris

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-05-09 09:44 AM

This is the first poem i've read by you, but i really like it a lot. you did a wonderful job on it and i hope you decide to keep sharing with us and rejoin all of us here. hope to read lots more soon

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

5 posted 2001-05-09 09:56 AM

Welcome Back Kris!! Great poem, I really enjoyed reading it. Hope you post more.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

6 posted 2001-05-09 03:35 PM

Thanks again for replying and i will keep writting.
Lovely_Kris

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-05-11 01:59 PM

welcome welcome welcome
It's nice to read your poem
you show your feelings really good
hope things to get better and
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

8 posted 2001-05-11 02:14 PM

Hey,

Welcome back

never met you before so Hey

I liked this alot hope I get to see more of your work. Until your next poem oh and on the 7th line last word you said "worm" don't you mean "warm" ???

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-05-16 01:26 AM

well done on this one....good to see you back!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

10 posted 2001-05-17 11:35 AM

Heyy im glad your back!!! I thought this one was good...Keep them coming!

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