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Stare You Down
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Stare You Down |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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Stare You Down I stare you down with my big glassy eyes Appropriately adorned with gold eye shadow I call you over with my alluring stance Consequently visible from where you stand I'd beat you up in knee boots If only they would fit I'd beat you up in leather But wouldn't give you the pleasure. I stare you down with my big glassy eyes Appropriately embellished with dark mascara I rise above you with my pink lipstick Once olive toned skin And platinum plated romance I drift away from you with my secret obsession And slightly asymmetrical hourglass shape A bit top heavy. I stare you down with my big glassy eyes Appropriately hued with deep brown I surpass you with my long hair Strawberry Fluff And jelly beans I entice you with my diamond ring Belly jeans Dear Arch-enemy. I stare you down with my big glassy eyes Appropriately lacking eyeliner I astound you with my rage Eloquence Glow I alarm you with my audacity La muger in jeans and a tight shirt "Evil Goddess." I stare you down with my big glassy eyes Consequently I cannot blink About to someone out there, notice "Dear Arch-enemy," and some others that have, well, pissed me off lately, some of you know who I speak of. Just a thought. Bel [This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 05-07-2001).] |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i disl;ike alotta them kinda ppl too..they get guys with their bodies..and tnot their personality!! *KiMMiE* |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think this is well written and hope to read more. I know what you mean. well keep up the great work. Lovely_Kris |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ohh man....... this is very powerful. Another piece of poetry that has you completely talking down to the person addressed by the poem. If this was directed at me, I'd have wet my pants. And I almost did anyway. Very good work, I love this style of poetry, Bel.  Oh and to the person she's talking about? *patpats* there there..... it'll be alright. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WOW Bel! Absolutely incredible. By far, the best piece I have read so far this week. The way it was written with such ferocity really stuck out. Yup, you rule too. Jeez...I'm finding a lot of people who rule today.  ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Great words and lots of imagery. You done good! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Hacas Junior Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 25 |
I agree with y'all, this was a very good piece of poetry. Keep up the good work Isabel! "Fight for what you believe in" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i always love reading your writing, this piece was certainly no exception. the images were really powerful in this, i like it a lot. my library will be a better place with more of your work in it keep writing beautiful poetry.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
hey girl, wow, what am i, 8th to post?? geez i gotta work on that. anyway, very nice poem and i think it definatly fits the person, if i got it right... i really liked the....well the wole thing!! good job baby te amo mi novia i am blinded by the silence of a breaking heart... i cant see myself |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done. This is very dif. from what I am used to reading from you, but it was good.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was an awesome read very powerful and the imagery as well..was amazing...thanks for sharing and hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
~*Standing Ovation*~ In the Library it goes, just one of the 4 I have in there [This message has been edited by acire (edited 05-24-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wowers, Bel. This is so raw with emotion that it blew me away. This is a beautiful piece of work. Simply amazing... I am truly impressed. Well done. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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