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Fading Away
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0 posted 05-07-2001 06:02 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Fading Away

You think Iím stronger,
and walk taller than the rest.
You think I have purpose,
you think I have pride.
You think I stand so firm,
and sit so securely in my trusted seat,
but, really,
Iím the one
usually face down on the ground
when thereís a problem.

You think I always have an answer,
to every one of your petty problems.
Well, if that was the case,
then why canít I fix
my broken,
helpless,
scared soul?

Itís funny,
I used to think the same things you did.
But a lot of the times,
I fool myself just like I fool you.
And the truth is,
you can doubt anything
if you think about it long enough.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Floyd - All Rights Reserved
lonely*soul
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1 posted 05-07-2001 06:07 PM       View Profile for lonely*soul   Email lonely*soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lonely*soul

id be happy if sumone thought i was good like that..i sure dont know the feeling..but i think i understand..good job on the poem!
          *KiM*
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2 posted 05-07-2001 10:45 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

The end thought is brilliant..... seriously, that caught my eye.  Just..... wow.  Great thought, that will be something I ponder while eating my banana and bowl of "Vector" tomorrow morning.  
Excellent work, Marie.  The entire poem was so very powerful.... such a wonderful display of your talent.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.††Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.††
~Unknown

banburycross
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3 posted 05-08-2001 10:19 AM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

I definetely agree with allan on this one, the ending of this piece gave me shivers all over my body    your writing is so powerful baby, and i read each poem slowly as if to savor it and keep it from ending for as long as possible.  your beautiful words inspire me love, don't ever stop writing incredible poetry.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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4 posted 05-08-2001 10:25 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

this is truly beautiful writing..i really liked this poem as always...cya~

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

vixengrl04
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5 posted 05-08-2001 10:46 AM       View Profile for vixengrl04   Email vixengrl04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vixengrl04

Sometimes we can fool our friends or just strangers into thinking that they we are someone other than what we are, and that we are capable of more than we truly are.  You expressed this well, and I really like this.  Good work.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Godsend_1
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6 posted 05-08-2001 11:21 AM       View Profile for Godsend_1   Email Godsend_1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Godsend_1

*runs up and give marie a giant hug*
hi hun i love ya you wrote an awesome poem here keep up the awesome work ok bye bye

ben
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7 posted 05-08-2001 11:32 AM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

       Superb job as always, thank you for yet another excellent poem for my library. You have be posting a lot of your work lately I like that I hope you continue to post this often I really enjoy reading your work. Until your next masterpiece your number 1 fan (arguably of course   )

                        -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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8 posted 05-15-2001 01:44 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

VERY negative message. Didn't like the message much but you wrote it very well. I liked the poem, actually.
Thought you did quite well on it, but I totally disliked the message. I hope we don't doubt everything, but I guess I just don't like it cuz i know you're right  

Good job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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Limbo


9 posted 12-11-2001 11:41 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Oh jeez....you've just described me..lol.
Way to go on such a fabulous piece. I happen to like negative pieces much better than positive. They tend to speak and read a lot better.

Once again, you have taken my breath away. Keep it up.  

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

paper doll
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Floating on Uncertainty


10 posted 09-02-2002 09:07 AM       View Profile for paper doll   Email paper doll   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paper doll

Yes, you can doubt anything. Thought is such an amazing mortal tool. We think we're using it to our advantage when in reality it is our ultimate destruction.

Thank you for such a vivid read. You're one hell of a writer.

~M
 
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