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broken wing
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0 posted 2001-05-06 11:38 AM


A broken wing
but not a broken soul
To this heart I shall bring healing
for nonother than that is my goal

My spirit was chrushed and trampled upon
I was hurt, stepped on, my heart was broken
Until my Me had just withdrawn
My uttered words just became unspoken

But all that was once upon a time ago
and my broken wing has begun to mend
My heart is shinning again with a glow
and my affections I shall no longer pretend


~not complete~


"The sun in your eyes made some of the lies worth believing."


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1 posted 2001-05-06 12:28 PM


I liked this poem. I thought it sounded great. I hope to see it when it is complete. Hope to see you post more in the future! I enjoy your work!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away
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2 posted 2001-05-06 01:19 PM


Very nice!  I can't wait to see the completed product.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

DragonFang
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3 posted 2001-05-06 01:28 PM


I really liked the sound of this. I hope to see it when it's completed (like that's not been said before  )

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.


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4 posted 2001-05-06 05:31 PM


Like an idiot I had thought before reading the replies that the poem was signed "not complete" because that was the alleged name of the author.  Shows how aware I am...  
Share with us the completed product and I'll give my completed thoughts.  Make sense?
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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5 posted 2001-05-20 10:11 PM


Can't wait to see the completion of this poem  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-05-20 10:20 PM


the flow was very nice...i hope to see the end of this poem soon...great job...keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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