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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2001-05-06 04:17 AM

Seated here this night, within the comforting clasp
Of the cold hand of the stars so far and distant.
I'd trade this moment for nothing in an instant....
To see what it is to be. It's so hard to grasp.

Those were the clouds just a moment ago; now lights
Flicker in their place, churning, breathing and living.
When I look deeper than science I see living
Testaments to the greatness of a God of lights.

Sanity is a virtue that lives within men
While they are with men... I am not. I am alone.
Here is the place where I can explore on my own,
The realm where God meets me without being human.

There's the moon with its volcanic rock and basalt.
There's the cold face that stares back at my lonely fears...
Here's the earth, a simple product of nature's years.
Here's the cradle of my life, a land to learn in fault...

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-05-06 12:19 PM

Well done keviN! I enjoyed this one a lot. Your themes are very deep and wonderful these days.....i enjoyed this poem a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-05-06 01:17 PM

Very nicely done! I enjoyed this a lot.
Good work!

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-05-06 05:28 PM

Your poetry is getting less military and more spiritual... I'm not sure if I like that personally but hey, we all change as poets.

This was a good poem. I notice you are experimenting with reuse of words as opposed to rhyming them lately, I personally don't like this technique but over time you might develop it to the point where it impresses even me.

Good work overall.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

sleepymoongirl
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

4 posted 2001-05-06 07:30 PM

whoa that was cool. idk what else to say but yeah awesome fro me

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

5 posted 2001-05-06 07:46 PM

Kevin..
i like this a lot..
you did such a good job letting the reader feel as though it was real!!
GREAT JOB!!

~ Jeff ~ :)

"If I'm not back in 5 minutes......just wait longer!"

"You may take our lives, but you'll never take our FREEDOM!!"

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

6 posted 2001-05-07 11:25 PM

OK Frac. I am going to have to come back later on and read this for it has just gone way over my head for the time being.

When I go into it a little more, you'll have a better reply from me. What I did catch though was interesting...

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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