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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Tears” Tears falling Like rain from my eyes Why must I keep this disguise? Why did you have to leave me? Tears fall Echoing upon the emptiness of my soul Nothingness bares much weight Which hurts my heart to hold Tears falling Crashing upon the pieces of my broken heart Mixing with regrets of feeling never shared I flood with feelings with in each single tear Tears fall Upon my hand The hand that once held yours Now empty, with nothing to hold on to Tears falling Upon your photograph Remembering how we used to be What I would do if I could only change the past Tears fall They fall in endless streams For the pain and the memory Of the one I love It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done! Hey wow I really liked this poem. The ending was great!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Thank you It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
. [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Beautiful poem, LoneWolf. I enjoyed this quite a lot.. a lot of emotion portrayed here. My fav stanza: "Tears fall Echoing upon the emptiness of my soul Nothingness bares much weight Which hurts my heart to hold" Such beautiful thoughts.. I relaly like the repitition. Each time "Tears fall" was used, it seems to get more powerful. Nice work. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
good discription of your feelings..i liked it enjoyed the poem..keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very nicely written! I like the variation you used in the first lines of each stanza, exchanging between "fall" and "falling." It allowed a real bay of possibilities for what you described in each stanza. You pulled this off very well! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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