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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Don't ask me what it means, sorry to say this is just another one that wrote itself Can you feel the evil surrounding your soul can you feel it's tentacles ensnaring your heart wrapping around it and squeezing until the last drop of blood seeps out to the ground leaving your heart dead and barren listen as that drop of blood hits the ground and bonds with the soil and as the blood begins to boil it spreads farther and farther, deeper as well then the blood encounters a seed a small fragile seed of a vine the blood makes the seed erupt spreading it's vines outward the grow thicker and longer one reaches up then another and another the plants tendrils encircle a heart... Doesn't really rhyme or anything...I guess you could call it free form? "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done....wonderful dark imagery!!! I really enjoyed this poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This one gave me chills. Nice job, POA. Another one for my library. The whole eerie feel of this poem was awesome! Well done! --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow awesome poem..i really enjoyed and acknowledge the dark imagery..its was nicely written...keep writing..  ... ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, good work... very dark, but that's the way (uh-huh uh-huh) I like it. I like the description of the path that the droplet of blood took, and its result. I thought this was brilliant symbolism. Awesome job! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
wow that poem was awesome. i haven't seen u around before i will look forward to reading more of ur stuff from me  |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Well, i dont know what you should title this one!! But it was dark..and believe it or not i like dark.. i just dont write much of it!! HEHE.. but great work!  ~ Jeff ~ :) |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
"Behold", he spoke with visions grave,"life's dark cycle." BRAVO! Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i agree wholeheartedly with allan on this one, the imagery and symbolism in this piece is absolutely incredible. i always enjoy reading your work, keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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