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lonely*soul
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0 posted 2001-05-05 02:42 PM


i wake from my slumber
and get overwelmed by the thought
of having to face the same things today
that ive already fought

i wake from my slumber
only to realize the dread
that i have to face another day
and crawl out of bed

i awake from my slumber
to think bout' creul things they'll do
they get off on my pain
i know the truth, nothing new

id like to see them all
be in my shoes for one day
and see if they think
all my problems should go away

they dont know what i feel
but they sure as hell know why
they are the reasons i think bout death
their the reasons i must die

and in the back of their minds
they know that so well
they just keep kicking me when im down
after ive already fell

its not like i matter anyways
im a nobody to them all
so now im waking up again
and ready for another fall

[This message has been edited by lonely*soul (edited 05-05-2001).]

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-05-05 02:44 PM


Kimmie, honey... this is a sad poem.     
Is something bothering you lately?  You know you can talk to us, we're your pals, right?  If you ever need anything at all you know where I can be reached, even if you just need someone to talk to.     Ok hon?
Keep your chin up a bit.
By the way, I enjoyed the poem quite a bit.     Good work here.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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2 posted 2001-05-05 03:23 PM


you know what i'm gonna say about this poem....i loved it..hehe..i did totally relate and go thru in my times of life..thanks for sharing such touching poems to my heart...keep writing them straight forward truthful poem...cya~ ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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3 posted 2001-05-06 01:36 AM


Wonderful poem, but sad. I enjoyed it and hope you get better!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
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viginia
4 posted 2001-05-06 03:47 PM


I love this poem, and i can definetely relate to it, i just hope everything is ok with you.  you did a wonderful job expressing your emotions in this, keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 2001-06-05 07:10 PM


Kimmie --- stay strong girl.  Don't let anyone make you feel lesser than they are.  Just laugh at them, even from within.  Be strong and keep ya head up    OK?

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele,

~sugarpie313~
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6 posted 2001-06-05 08:32 PM


great poem. i so totally relate.   i love it


Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

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with you
7 posted 2001-06-05 09:17 PM


breaking my heart here.....don't let mean people win.....if you need to talk....email me....I'm here....I care    SEA
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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
8 posted 2001-06-09 12:43 PM


Ahhhh i liked it hehehe   Good job hun!
stace_co2003
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9 posted 2001-06-09 05:27 PM


*hugs*

I hope things get better for you!! I can really relate to this poem too. especially right now.  

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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