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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-05-01 10:20 PM

The pencil still remains unsharpened.
May came unnoticed. In the yard,
The sprouts spread the verdant carpet
And all is stirring, but the heart.

There, on the grass, under the thickets,
Where you and I, once in the fall,
Hid from the rain, the restless crickets
Evoke your laughter in my soul.

I miss you dear, -- your lustful smile,
And that imprudent, heedless gaze
That draws one further into guile
And leaves unsatisfied and dazed.

How many winters passed us by,
When verses kept the fire burning?
You came one night to say “good-bye,”
And left me early in the morning.

Since then, I have not heard a word.
I’ve searched for you with no avail,
And by the icons prayed the Lord
When all the rest appeared to fail.

And now I hear the mellow songs
Of nightingales in the evening
And all this beauty just prolongs
The day of solitude and grieving.

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 05-03-2001).]

chas
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 101
Lynn, ma

1 posted 2001-05-01 10:26 PM

Humm……..chocolate

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-01 10:37 PM

I enjoyed it. WOnderful flow...just a great job in whole. I thought the whole poem rocked. Very well done. I enjoyed the last stanza best.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-05-03 05:11 PM

I liked this a lot! The rhyme scheme is very nicely done, and the flow is excellent! Nice work, Master.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

4 posted 2001-05-03 08:01 PM

Your still my fav master,
your untouchable

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-05-08 09:54 AM

This is definitely melancholy
still a pleasant experience to read you work
keep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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