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Fading Away
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0 posted 05-01-2001 02:42 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Fading Away

I'm tired of spending every day
Hidden behind you,
Watching your every move,
And wondering what it takes to survive.
It's like I'm standing here,
Hiding in the harsh folds of my sweater,
Not because I can't win,
But because I don't even want to try.
Every piece of dirtied luggage
That you toss on me,
Adds another step to my ladder;
And it seems I can only apologize
When really,
It isn't even my fault.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 05-01-2001).]

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1 posted 05-01-2001 02:50 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Wow Marie....this one was pretty jam packed with power......I hope allz well..
  ~Carly

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked.  And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears."   ~Kahil Gibran

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2 posted 05-01-2001 06:15 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is a very powerful piece. Being stepped on is really tough, but you shouldn't apologize to this person. I hope things work out for you. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli
Blame Canada!

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3 posted 05-01-2001 06:20 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

I can only echo everyone else and say that this is a really powerful poem.  you packed as much emotion into ths as you could have and i wouldn't change a thing about it.  this gave me shivers, great writing love.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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4 posted 05-01-2001 06:29 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed reading your poem...James
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your poems always gives..
me something to think about...
powerful...and hard situation in life
so much unfairness but you explained it so well
i liked this poem..and enjoyed by me
thanks for sharing marie

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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6 posted 05-01-2001 08:26 PM       View Profile for lonely*soul   Email lonely*soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lonely*soul

sounds like a broken record..but this is powerful...great job!!
      *KiM*
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7 posted 05-01-2001 10:19 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Then don't apologize!
I enjoyed the poem, but don't feel bad if you didn't do anything....that's a sign of a low self esteem.
But anyway, well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 05-01-2001 10:27 PM       View Profile for chas   Email chas   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chas

Humm……..chocolate
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I didn't like this, but I really don't like free verse all that much so I'm biased.  
It seemed to have a lot of emotion behind it.  I'll echo Javier's advice.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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10 posted 12-11-2001 11:30 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Despite the way it is written, there is a lot of strength behind it.

Well done, Marie. Another enjoyed read.

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

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11 posted 09-02-2002 09:00 AM       View Profile for paper doll   Email paper doll   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paper doll

I don't usually feel poems as such but this one spoke straight to my heart. It's never enough for some people and we always end up as the scape goat.

Wonderful piece of writing. Hopefully things will have improved for you.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

 
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