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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
this is about a friend of mine. she hides from the world in all honesty because these feelings scare her to death she doesnt know what to do anymore shes blinded by her own situation she cries herself to sleep at night she searches herself for solutions she doesnt know what to do anymore shes blinded by her own situation she talks to you everyday but you dont really listen she doesnt know what to do anymore shes blinded by her own situation her eyes plea for you to understand for you to see her as she is for you to just ask her how her day was and then wait to hear her answer you only hear what you want to hear you only look skin deep you dont really give a crap about her you only cause her pain she doesnt know what to do anymore shes blinded by her own situation ugh it edited out the word i wanted to use so just use ur imagination  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet" [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 04-30-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very sad.....very sad situation your friend is in. I hope you aid her properly and that she gets better and SEES the truth   I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
I think a lot of people are that way. Many are just waiting for someone to ask and also wait to listen to the answer. We can't always do that but it's not always because we don't really care. We're only human. |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
I think a lot of people are that way. Many are just waiting for someone to ask and also wait to listen to the answer. We can't always do that but it's not always because we don't really care. We're only human. <3~*Rachael*~<3 |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Aww this one is really sad!! It kind of reminds me of myself though..Was it written about you, or someone you know? It's honestly very good though, and I'm gonna add it to my library. Good work on this. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
This one was sad. I'm glad its about a friend and not yourself. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This poem is really good. I liked it a lot and I am putting it into my library. I think this may be one of my favorites I think it’s really good I hope to see more just as good and better from you. Until your next work -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It seems like your friend is in a very hard situation right now. Stay with her and be thr true friend that you are to her. How can I tell that you are a true friend to her? Well, the poem obviously show it keep sharing"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
What acire said, and good job on the poem. "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I agree with Happy Pretender... people are people. You should understand this. Mice work on the poem though. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
 It wasn't a typo! MICE work on the poem! They really do!  Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. ~Unknown [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 05-09-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
^LOL!!..  but that poem..discribed such a sad situation hope everything turns out good for your friend..and good job on showing it thru a poem...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
wonderful emotion in this, i like this piece a lot. i especially liked your use of italics in this, it really made those lines stand out. this is beautiful writing, i love reading your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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