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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

0 posted 2001-04-30 05:32 PM

No explanation- just something I thought about. Wow my second poem in 2 days!
Bel

I want
I want to stay with my boyfriend
Who loves me and respects me
I want to see myself as a beautiful woman
I want color back in my skin
I want the circles gone from under my eyes
I want to look great in that swimsuit
I want to not worry
When my boyfriend looks at other girls
I want to believe that I'm the only girl he wants
I want to not care about what I eat
I want to not count the calories
And still look as great as them
I want to be that size 2
I want to believe the guys who compliment me
I want to you to see me for who I am
I want to see myself for who I am
I want to succeed
And achieve perfection
I want to have self-confidence
I want to have self-esteem
I want to not be depressed
I want to trust
I want my pain to stop
I want my wounds to heal
I want my anger cease
And my screaming to silence
I want
I want too much
I want what I can't have
I am greedy

"And you're my obsession
I love you to the bones
And Ana wrecks your life
Like an anorexia life"
- "Ana's Song", Silverchair

[This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 04-30-2001).]

ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

1 posted 2001-04-30 05:50 PM

yO bel...im greedy too...and want most of the things u do...except I DONT HAVE A BOYFRIEND...and i really REALLY want one of those...it was good!

cya tomorrow ~jo~

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

2 posted 2001-04-30 06:00 PM

LOL!! thanks Jobethel. Have you SEEN some of these people lately...take the odd natured people for example....ew...who'd want one of them.

haha thanks again chica
Bel

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-30 06:44 PM

Believe it, the last line made me go "OH" out loud.

The last line is GENIUS. It completely brought the poem into a new light, was so creative and just overall... brilliant. I was prepared to call the poem mediocre until I read that, and now I daresay that because of the overall building up to and so not disappointing with the ending, this is one of your best, perhaps the best.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

CLBinLOVE
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since 2000-06-04

Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA

4 posted 2001-04-30 07:54 PM

wow...you even impressed allan, very nice poem!
btw i dont check out other girls, all i see is how much they resemble you

i love you!

i am blinded by the silence of a breaking heart... i cant see myself

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-30 11:02 PM

I liked the poem. Great last line....and BTW I DO check out other girls

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

6 posted 2001-05-01 03:27 PM

Allan- WOW I'm impressed now...I got a compliment from YOU! Geez

Craig- Yeah, sure chico..right.

I love you too
Dopey- Gracias. Aww that breaks my heart *sigh*

But, we both know soy la más bonita.
Thanks again,
Bel

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-05-10 10:11 AM

I want you to stop thinking to much of yourself and focus on the more important things in life

he he he lol

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

8 posted 2001-05-10 01:07 PM

This is a really impressive display of your talent, i like this a lot. i don't think that you are greedy at all, all the things you want are the things that you deserve

i always love your writing, keep posting your poetry.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-06-16 01:02 PM

This is an amazing poem, Isabel. It hit home hard... The last line was so amazing, and powerful. This poem is definitely going right into my library. Beautiful work. I enjoyed this poem greatly.
I'm bumping this one back to page one where it belongs

Nice work.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

10 posted 2001-06-16 01:30 PM

wow!...this is powerful and the ending is what made it more...and umm..i guess you REALLY into that fomat..huh?

...anyways...byeW:ave:

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

11 posted 2001-09-08 04:03 AM

wowowowowowowow!!!

I LOVE this! Absolutely LOVE it. All the wanting is exactly what so many people go through. You have this knack for writing exactly what people are thinking. Your last line is just amazing. It throws you off completely but compliments the entire piece perfectly.

Wow! You have out done yourself here. I am really glad I was checking the archives and found this one. You're an amazing writer.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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