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takemeawaytoday
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0 posted 2001-04-30 01:46 AM


You said you would always be there for me
You left when times got rough

You said you would always care about me and love me
You left again, when you werew scare of what might happen

When I said we were through,
You told me you were sorry.
I had to let you go because of the pain

It seems after much time of tring to forget you
I gave up and let the tug inside me win


The next time I saw you, you change so much
I didn't even recognize
You were so violent and cruel

I was so scare of you
I ran and hid, hoping you wouldn't find me.

You never found me
I thought I was out of danger

I was wrong you found me
You hurt me again

When you finally gave up
You never knew how much you really hurt me


You never know how much you've actually been hurt or hurt someone else until the time has already passed. Don't be like the person in the peom.  I know it's not that good of one but it comes from the heart and it need to be known

© Copyright 2001 Jenny - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-30 01:49 AM


"weLCOME TO PASSions"

and i really liked the emotions in this poem
even tho it wasnt good ones..
and i personally liked the last message
you stated after the poem..it shows the reader to think more after the poem..
thanks for sharing and keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Godsend_1
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2 posted 2001-04-30 01:59 AM


amazing jen you have a talent i never knew existed your poem was heartfelt and that made it great keep up the awesome work ok and welcome to passions

ben

ps. watch out for allan he is just a mean old man

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

[This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 04-30-2001).]

knightlyshadows
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3 posted 2001-04-30 09:03 AM


JEN!   HEY HUN DIDNT KNOW U WERE JOININ OR THAT YOU COULD WRITE!!!!!
welcome to passions!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
great poem
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

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4 posted 2001-04-30 09:09 AM


NO, ALan is a good guy, dont be silly!!  
BUt Great poem and welcome!!
Jeff

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5 posted 2001-04-30 09:52 AM


First of all,  @everyone

Interesting verse.  Couplets were a nice form to use in communicating this message.  I suppose the advice would be helpful to some in many situations, thanks for the tip.  
Welcome to Passions in Poetry.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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6 posted 2001-04-30 11:45 AM


Welcome!!   Please check your email for a special greeting    SEA
banburycross
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7 posted 2001-04-30 01:06 PM


Welcome to passions!!

the emotion in this piece was very good and i liked the format you used, couplets are good times.  i know you'll love it here at passions, i look forward to reading lots more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Ina
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8 posted 2001-04-30 01:22 PM


Welcoome to passions!!!

this was an amazing first post.

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

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9 posted 2001-04-30 10:23 PM


Welcome to passions!!!! I hope you enjoy your stay here. It was a very good first post and I hope to read more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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10 posted 2001-05-01 01:54 PM


Welcome to Passions!  VERY nice first post!  I enjoyed this quite a bit, and I looke forward to seeing more.
Nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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11 posted 2001-05-01 02:03 PM


Hey,

   Great poem *bell* OMG got to hurry or I will be late to my beloved spanish class   okay well it was a wonderful poem  and I am looking forward to more thanks for the great read okay teacher is yelling got to go buenos tardes (sp)

             -- Linc

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12 posted 2001-05-03 05:53 PM


Welcome To Passions!!!!

This was so unfair for the person to do 2 you and im sorry that you had that happen...I cant wait to read more from you and welcome again!!!  

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13 posted 2001-05-03 08:47 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!  

Glad to see you join us here in Passions for Poetry.  Hope you enjoy reading poems and sharing yur own work too.  Thanks for the great read on the first work you've shared with us.  Hope to see more in the future.

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

lonely*soul
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14 posted 2001-05-03 09:47 PM


welcome to passions!!! im sure youll love it here..great first poem..and definatly from the heart..i cant relate  

        *KiM*

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