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my war |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
Rage in the temple Rage in the sea Rage in the land of perfect harmony The war rages on Fighting for the love I need Fighting for the love I breath Fighting for the love of you death in my temple death in my sea death in my land of perfect harmony the war rages on I know I’m gonna lose I think I am gonna cry I know I need the love of you peace in your temple peace in your sea peace in you land of perfect harmony the war rages no more I believe I won the war I believe I won this land I believe I won the love of you i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
hey ben that b cool. i haven't been on for quite awhile. thats cool this poem had a more up beat sence to it. loves ya from me scarlet as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
good job on the poem... keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
:O its me scarlet :O *jumps on u* i miss you  ( ur never heres no mores! u have a live so grrrr@u :P jkslol u already know that i like this one ben  i love you *hugs* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh, this was the one that you showed me earlier. I love how you touched it up, very well done! The end result is magnificent! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was wonderful! I really enjoyed this one. Well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Me like. It was Great. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really enjoyed this read! Nicely done. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
good for you  such an uplifting read specially in the end nice to see youve made it keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great poem. Nuff said. Mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Oh Ben this one was really good, I reeeallly liked it alot! Keep rightin, k's? Ttyl hun, ali |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
WOW! I like this, it's really cool! Great job   ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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