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Remember Your Umbrella
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Remember Your Umbrella |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA 
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Nothing ventured Nothing gained Go out and venture But prepare for the rain Torrential downpours Winds fierce and strong Happiness and sunshine Never last for long So enjoy your sunny smiles While they last And remember your umbrella For the pain can come fast "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great symbolism in this piece! I liked the first two lines, I've heard that saying before. Well done bringing them into the poem. A wonderful post, thanks for the read!  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I think I agree with Allan!! Cool symbolism... Love it!! Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey Sara, Bryan here. lol, thanks for posting this! omg, this is almost perfect for me right now! great poem anyway, thanks again! No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Hey gurlie! I am glad your posting the ones that you sent me, those were so good they need to be shared! Well i must say you write poetry better then you pay attention where roads are at night LOL jk!! we gotta hang out more often... hahaha ur cool poo! GOOD JOB ON THE POEM!!!Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Never been more true.....Pain does come fast so plz do enjoy it and well i love this poem thanks for writting and keep it up. *Tears of love* |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Thanx for your great replies everyone I don't like this one, but as long as you all do, then cool! *LOL*-Sara- "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I like the whole idea of having an umbrella. Very well done here!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
What about a raincoat?  Seriously, the symbolism and the message is really written down well. keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Wow I think this is my favorite that I have read by you, because it's just so cute and really really nicely written. The symbolism is excellent, and really truthful. Love the way this was written. Into my library. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the symbolism was quite nice...i enjoyed this alot...thanks for sharing it...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the symbolism was quite nice...i enjoyed this a lot the flow was nice also...thanks for sharing it... ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the symbolism was quite nice...i enjoyed this a lot the flow was nice also...thanks for sharing it... ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Nice metaphor. My mind has now messed around with it and I have Shirley Manson's yummy voice in I'm Only Happy When it Rains stuck in my head. written in blood before everything went black |
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