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Suga_Baby
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0 posted 04-28-2001 12:01 AM       View Profile for Suga_Baby   Email Suga_Baby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Suga_Baby

Nothing ventured
Nothing gained
Go out and venture
But prepare for the rain

Torrential downpours
Winds fierce and strong
Happiness and sunshine
Never last for long

So enjoy your sunny smiles
While they last
And remember your umbrella
For the pain can come fast

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

© Copyright 2001 Sara - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 04-28-2001 04:26 AM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Great symbolism in this piece!  I liked the first two lines, I've heard that saying before.  Well done bringing them into the poem.
A wonderful post, thanks for the read!  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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2 posted 04-28-2001 07:37 AM       View Profile for Jenn Cirrincione   Email Jenn Cirrincione   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn Cirrincione

I think I agree with Allan!!
Cool symbolism... Love it!!

Jenn

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

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3 posted 04-28-2001 09:35 AM       View Profile for Elvenblood   Email Elvenblood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elvenblood

     Hey Sara, Bryan here.  lol, thanks for posting this!  omg, this is almost perfect for me right now!  great poem anyway, thanks again!

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

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4 posted 04-28-2001 10:59 AM       View Profile for ~sugarpie313~   Email ~sugarpie313~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~sugarpie313~

Hey gurlie! I am glad your posting the ones that you sent me, those were so good they need to be shared! Well i must say you write poetry better then you pay attention where roads are at night LOL   jk!!  we gotta hang out more often... hahaha ur cool poo!   GOOD JOB ON THE POEM!!!


Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

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5 posted 04-28-2001 11:51 AM       View Profile for branden726   Email branden726   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for branden726

Never been more true.....Pain does come fast so plz do enjoy it and well i love this poem thanks for writting and keep it up.

*Tears of love*
*Tears of faith*
*Never any Tears of hate*

Suga_Baby
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6 posted 04-28-2001 02:17 PM       View Profile for Suga_Baby   Email Suga_Baby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suga_Baby

Thanx for your great replies everyone   I don't like this one, but as long as you all do, then cool!   *LOL*
-Sara-

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

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7 posted 04-29-2001 05:11 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I like the whole idea of having an umbrella. Very well done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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What about a raincoat?  
Seriously, the symbolism  and the message is really written down well.
keep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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Wow I think this is my favorite that I have read by you, because it's just so cute and really really nicely written.  The symbolism is excellent, and really truthful.  Love the way this was written.  Into my library.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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the symbolism was quite nice...i enjoyed this  alot...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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the symbolism was quite nice...i enjoyed this  a lot the flow was nice also...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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the symbolism was quite nice...i enjoyed this  a lot the flow was nice also...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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Nice metaphor. My mind has now messed around with it and I have Shirley Manson's yummy voice in I'm Only Happy When it Rains stuck in my head.

written in blood before everything went black

JCV

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