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CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
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Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2001-04-26 07:50 PM


This is one of the first poems I ever wrote.  The last two stanzas get a little bit out of rhythm, though.  Oh well, tell me what you think.

Carry On

Be cool
Be strong
Don’t be afraid to be wrong
With your Faith
And help from the Lord
You can carry on

Be great
Be big
It may take some time
You may have to dig
But with your faith
And help from the Lord
You can carry on

Be smart
Be quick
Go ahead
Take your pick
Live life well
Or out on the street
With your faith
And help from the Lord
You can carry on

Be alive
Be fun
Get out
Go run
Life is short
You have only one
With your faith
And help from the Lord
You can carry on

      - Cody -

Living From Memories
Living From Thoughts
There Are Some Things In Live
That Cannot Be Taught

© Copyright 2001 C.K.N. - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-04-26 08:31 PM


I really enjoyed this. the format is good....i liked it in general....well done!


Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-04-26 08:31 PM


I really enjoyed this. the format is good....i liked it in general....well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-04-26 08:45 PM


Moi aussi.  I did like the format, very original.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

IsGona
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4 posted 2001-04-26 10:36 PM


Nice flow and format on this one
~Jason

CAP
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5 posted 2001-04-26 10:42 PM


Nice, That poem boosted my confidence up a lil  
Low Man's Lyric
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In a dream
6 posted 2001-04-26 11:22 PM


I think this poem flowed very smoothly, the whole poem was good. Two thumbs up by Low Man's Lyric!

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."  
~Anonymous

Ina
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Quebec, Canada
7 posted 2001-04-26 11:26 PM


this was amazing. more because of the message. the flow was excellent. all in all amaizng impact.
library piece.

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

vixengrl04
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East Haddam, CT
8 posted 2001-04-27 10:39 AM


This is very good, and motivational.  I like it.  Good job.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

knightlyshadows
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9 posted 2001-04-27 10:58 AM


very nice
tiff

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10 posted 2001-04-27 12:58 PM


i really liked the message..
u put in here
also the format was great
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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