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~DreamChild~
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in your dreams

0 posted 2001-04-25 02:46 PM


In our Hands
we hold our hearts.

Hand in Hand
we'll never part.

Take my Hand,
take my heart, too.

I take Yours,
to wed,
I Do.

© Copyright 2001 derrick gillum - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-04-25 05:42 PM


Ooh, very nice.     What a sweet set of words.  Hang onto this one...
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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2 posted 2001-04-25 05:43 PM


Oh wow, this was completely sweet!!! Very nicely done. I enjoyed it a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-04-25 06:24 PM


Beautiful description of the joining of love... I really like this one. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli
Blame Canada!

MoeRocko
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4 posted 2001-04-25 06:29 PM


Cool one  Short and Sweet

Nice choice words

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5 posted 2001-04-25 07:18 PM


This was great.  Short, but to the point.  Keep it up!

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

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6 posted 2001-04-25 10:35 PM


beautiful, lovebug
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with you
7 posted 2001-04-26 10:02 AM


this is lovely!  
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8 posted 2001-04-26 10:45 AM


Short but sweet and very beautiful.
Well done.
Zu

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Godsend_1
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9 posted 2001-04-26 11:50 AM


cool short and sweet just they way i like it you are like super sweet babe keep it up *hugs*

ben redshaw the great and now and forever totally in love

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

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10 posted 2001-04-26 12:53 PM


Hey,

          Awww that was short and very sweet almost made me cry :’( just kidding J this is a very nice poem. Until next time

       -- Linc

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knightlyshadows
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11 posted 2001-04-26 02:20 PM


awww *sniff* i liked this very muchs!
im addin this to me library

*looks at ewok* i want me sox u dork!:P

tiff

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"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

Shygirl82
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12 posted 2001-04-26 06:22 PM


Short and sweet and excellent emotions..I really liked this one
~Nikki~

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13 posted 2001-04-26 08:56 PM


Very sweet and expressive!  It's a challenge to write a powerful poem that's short, but you've done a great job here!
Nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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14 posted 2001-04-27 11:16 AM


Not alot of words, but definitely a lot of meaning.  It's sweet.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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