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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-04-24 10:46 PM

She left the window opened slightly.
A playful draft tugged at the shades.
She said her farewells rather dryly.
She left. She left me at the gates.

Her eyes contained a hint of anguish.
They glowed with mystical appeal.
I helped her pack and now she vanished.
She left. She left me standing still.

She had to... Yes, I heard her reasons!
And yet, it hurt to watch her leave.
The golden dust arose in distance.
She left. She left me here in grief.

My head had rested on her shoulder
As though upon a guillotine.
This was the fate I couldn’t alter,--
She left. She left me with a grin.

She took my heart into possession.
So quickly, to escape the theft,
She left without my concession.
I’ll trace her by the scent she left.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-04-24 11:29 PM

I enjoyed this! I haven't seen you in a while and when I saw the post I made sure i'd get to it before the night ended. I really thought you did well on this one. Hope to see you post more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-04-25 01:08 AM

this felt so sad...but very well done!

SEA

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

3 posted 2001-04-25 03:10 AM

i really enjoyed this thankx for the great read i hope to read more from you super soon ok later
ben redshaw the great and now kinda sleepy cuz he hasnt gotten no sleep but just read an awesome poem so he gonna go look for more

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-04-25 05:37 PM

Good job on this one, Master. I must say I am developing an appreciation for your overall style, and I look forward to your next post.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-04-25 07:43 PM

Nice to see you posting again!
I liked this a lot.. and I hope to see more!
Nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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