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MindlessPoet
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0 posted 2001-04-24 09:40 PM


RETURN TO ME

Thoughts tossing and turning
Troubled over so many things
I lay alone in my room
And listen to the angels sing.

Their notes, so soft and gentle
Oh so pleasing to the ear.
The words become enchanting
And there is nothing else I wish to hear.

For their song erases my fears
The troubles and worries of my day
I meditate on the soothing sounds
And when the notes soften, I pray

I pray for the return of the soothing song
For our evil world is one I wish not to face
The notes stop completely and I am afraid.
In vain, after the heavenly beings I race

Sweet song of the angels,
Return to me
For you are my escape
From reality.

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me.  The Weird One.

© Copyright 2001 Tim Church - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-24 11:16 PM


This had a serene feeling with it. I love poems that put me in a calm mood....calm leads to being lazy....and lazy is good!
Great job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-04-25 01:13 AM


This is very pretty, I enjoyed the soft feel to it    SEA
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3 posted 2001-04-25 01:27 AM


enjoyed much by me..
nice job..
and keep writing

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death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Godsend_1
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4 posted 2001-04-25 02:13 AM


i really liked this man it was truely soothing it just kinda made you relaxe and think but about nothign to hard or strong thanx for the read
ben redshaw the great

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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5 posted 2001-04-25 06:52 AM


nice job i really liked this one

never knock on deaths door and run......he hates that!!

Starr
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6 posted 2001-04-25 02:38 PM


This is truly a soothing poem... It was as if it mesmerized me when I was reading it!
I liked it a lot!  
Keep posting!

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

Chel
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7 posted 2001-04-25 04:04 PM


Great piece.  I am sure you dont know me, thats because I am always busy and haven't posted anything new yet.  But great piece keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it"


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8 posted 2001-04-25 05:49 PM


Yes, the tone of this poem is marvelous, it really put me in the mood to sip a glass of wine.     Excellent job on this aspect of the poem.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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9 posted 2001-04-26 08:12 PM


This is very good.. I really like the way you made it sound.. you portrayed everything so well here.  VERY nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

vixengrl04
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10 posted 2001-04-27 01:57 PM


This is really beautiful.  I like the way it flows and I especially like the actual content of it.  It's good.  Great work, and hope to see more from u!  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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