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Teen Poetry #4

A typical day

Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-04-22 06:21 PM

I’ve been wondering around
In circles of confuseness
Surrounded by the ocean waves
And their sweet making sound

Writing a poem about a girl
Who deserves true love
Because of the beauty she brings
To everything in this world

Walking on a rainy day
I’m cold and freezing
Everything around is sulking wet
The sky’s black versus gray

Been going for a walk
On another typical day
With the wind in my hair
Just hearing the trees talk

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2001-04-22 06:53 PM

Duncha mean confusion? Hehehehehe. Nice werk! you be koo.
~Carly

There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-24 03:22 PM

I have no clue why this has already gone passed 100 poems down and it only had 1 reply....geesh!
Sorry i was delayed a day or two in replying.
ANyhow......yea carly is right about the word correction. I liked the poem....good job on it.
Hope to see more....you oughta start replying more too....maybe that's why some people aren't replying to you....cuz you don't reply to them....oh well....have fun...peace.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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