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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2001-04-22 03:39 PM


There's no chance in life that I can learn to forget
no chamce at all no matter what's been said
the time we shared felt like forever
I will always remember, the moments we had
together.

Girl I missed you
from the second you left
I've stayed strong
but I can't take anymore
long to kiss you
hold you in my arms
the nights are long
since you closed the door

learned from my mistakes but I can't change the past
I'm so sorry if I have moved to fast
the days without you seems so endless
and I wont ever sleep, until you're here I
wont rest.

Girl I missed you
from the second you left
I've stayed strong
but I can't take anymore
long to kiss you
hold you in my arms
the nights are long
since you closed the door



© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
1 posted 2001-04-22 06:02 PM


You know, when i got to the part about moving too fast, i acutally said, "opps" out loud.
Relationships are fragile indeed, but one of the best ways to know if your going to fast is to simply ask the other person!  Sounds too daft to really work, but it does.
Cool poem, be lonely hurts.    

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My skull has glowing green eyes!

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2 posted 2001-04-22 06:07 PM


It's hard to get over someone we truly loved isn't it?  Such sad words on such a sad poem.  Hope things get better gor you.  thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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3 posted 2001-04-23 12:46 PM


Sounded like a song to me. I enjoyed the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away
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4 posted 2001-04-23 03:24 PM


Nice job, I enjoyed this!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

anonymous albert ?
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5 posted 2001-04-23 04:28 PM


very good job~!!@!
and keep writing

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death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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