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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2001-04-21 07:55 PM


When I was alone,
And had no one to turn to...
And who was there for me?
You were there.

When I was so unsure,
And I needed the truth,
When I searched for the one to help me,
You were there.

And even when we fell apart,
And our fun was over.
Even when I broke you're heart,
You were always there.


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1 posted 2001-04-21 09:18 PM


Sounds like a great person...I admire him

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-04-21 09:25 PM


this was a good poem but...
to be honest..
this poem the way u written it
sounds a lot like a poem by tupac called "GOD"
anyways...i liked it though
keep writing i believe u write something
sometimes and it seems similar.. it happens so.keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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3 posted 2001-04-22 02:13 AM


I was thinking it might have something to do with a "god" of some sort.  Nicely done still, Jenn... I like this one, whoever it was about.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
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4 posted 2001-04-22 07:29 AM


Hey thanks for the replies. And I don't listen to Tupac... I think I may have heard like 2 songs... maybe. I didn't even know he wrote something called God.... was that the one for his mother?
Anyway... thanks again.

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

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5 posted 2001-04-23 08:07 PM


Its nice to see that you had someone by your side. You are very lucky  
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6 posted 2001-04-23 08:16 PM


Nicely penned Jenn.
whomever or whatever this is about sounds like a beutiful being.
I hope to read more from ya
Jason

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7 posted 2001-04-23 08:50 PM


You're lucky you have someone like this.  We all should have someone like this in our lives.  It makes everything so much more beautiful..
Nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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8 posted 2001-04-23 08:52 PM


Seems like this guy might be a keeper Jenn    Thanks for sharing  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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9 posted 2001-04-23 08:56 PM


Yeah, you would've thought so. We aren't together now.lol
Circumstances.... etc...

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

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10 posted 2001-04-23 09:30 PM


Great Job, Jenn. It's good to hear you have someone in your life like that...  

Take care, keep posting!

*love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.*

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11 posted 2001-04-23 11:06 PM


nahhhh....its a poem called "GOD" lol !!
not his mother
and who calls their mother "GOD"..????
.......anyways...bye....

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death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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