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The Diary Of A Dying Soul

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Kicking Kim
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0 posted 04-21-2001 06:07 PM       View Profile for Kicking Kim   Email Kicking Kim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Kicking Kim's Home Page   View IP for Kicking Kim

Diary Of A Dying Soul

Eyes fixed on the mirror.
Thin?
Fading away.
Nostalgic thoughts of a distant memory of beauty
still I don't believe it.
Lacking suffiency,
becoming the victim of my own sacrifice,
under eating to extremity.
Without thinking twice.
Aware of the consequences,
of continuous diet,
minimizing my personality,
as well as my size.
Food forbidden,
will unwritten,
insecurity hidden.
Could you live like this?

Thoughts controlled
mind revolved.
A predator upon my own flesh,
feeding on mind and soul.
Mind taking over body.
Out of control.
As I think of myself
I see a wilting flower and I wonder
if I ever had true beauty.


"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

[This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-21-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Kimberley Mason - All Rights Reserved
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i loved the title.
and the poem itself had so much pain in it
u written it so well...
but hope things r alright
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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2 posted 04-21-2001 06:19 PM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

        Kim, this is...wow...this is a great poem filled with emotion. It reminded me of one of my friend. He does some of the same things in this poem. Did you wite this about yourself? Until your next wonderful poem

            -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Kicking Kim
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3 posted 04-21-2001 06:23 PM       View Profile for Kicking Kim   Email Kicking Kim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kicking Kim's Home Page   View IP for Kicking Kim

Thnx guys! Its nice to see my poems being accepted and even complimented!!

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

[This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 04-21-2001).]

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4 posted 04-21-2001 08:47 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Why wouldn't your poems be accepted, let alone not complimented? You are quite the talented writer from what I've see so far. Your poems are ver well written, this one included. Quite powerful.
I liked it very much and hope to see more.
I also hope that your situation with the eating problem gets better.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 04-22-2001 02:11 AM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

My acceptance, and compliments.     Very well done, I have a close friend who could relate to this poem.  I am interested to see her reply.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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6 posted 04-22-2001 01:46 PM       View Profile for Bishop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bishop

Wow.  This is very powerful!  I loved the title and the poem is fab!! plz read mine "Terminal disease". Thx
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7 posted 04-22-2001 01:51 PM       View Profile for DarkAngelOfTheStars   Email DarkAngelOfTheStars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkAngelOfTheStars

this poem is great i can relate so much.  Keep up the good work!

never knock on deaths door and run......he hates that!!

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8 posted 04-22-2001 05:42 PM       View Profile for Deranger   Email Deranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deranger

Socially applied sterotypes, enforced by the mind; an evering-submitting slave to that society.  Ouch.   I'm sorry.  I really like your poem, the pain was so obvious and exqusite.  

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9 posted 04-23-2001 03:37 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

This one hit real hard, Kim.. very hard.
I liked it.  You put lots of emotion in this that really expressed how hard this situation is.
Nice job, and *hugs* to you.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Kicking Kim
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10 posted 04-25-2001 11:14 AM       View Profile for Kicking Kim   Email Kicking Kim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kicking Kim's Home Page   View IP for Kicking Kim

Thankyou all for the support but there is no need to worry the poem is not about me!!  I am very ingrigued by Anorexia Nervosa disorder because I am interested in the psychology behind it, what makes someone so thin think they are so fat?  I wrote a poem about it after reading an article in a magazine because I wanted to capture the insecurity and pain in a poem.  Thankyou all so much for caring though!!  *hugs you all*

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

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11 posted 06-30-2001 05:56 PM       View Profile for Heavens Tears   Email Heavens Tears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Heavens Tears

After reading your reply to Tamma, I had to go find this poem you mentioned.  You did a wonderful job.  I am glad that you are not suffering from an eating disorder though.

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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12 posted 07-01-2001 01:13 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Wow Kim! Great write here!
The emotion and sorrow portrayed in this is so strong that I was worried for you. I'm glad it's not about you. Anyway, like I said- Great Write! You did an amazing job. So real. Keep posting!  
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13 posted 07-01-2001 10:08 AM       View Profile for Spine Grinder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spine Grinder

wow, this was great. i really enjoyed this alot.thankcs 4 the read.

fall hard, practice harder not to fall
Don't belong, Don't exist, Don't give a S***, Don't ever judge me  -Slipknot

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14 posted 09-07-2001 03:10 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Strong piece and I commend you for writing it. Not a lot of people can pull off eating disorder pieces but you do it well.

it speaks from the heart and has an awesome flow to it. Be proud.  

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

 
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