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sleepymoongirl
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0 posted 2001-04-21 04:11 PM



fluffy white and pretty
floating the whole day by
not a thought about tomorrow
a grace to envy
weightless
no burden for you to carry
so care free as the day passes by


(short yet nice one of my more happy poems)

© Copyright 2001 Scarlet Saunders - All Rights Reserved
Angel Bee
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1 posted 2001-04-21 04:22 PM


short and simple, good job. keep writing. ab

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2 posted 2001-04-21 05:28 PM


i liked it...short and nice..
i also related to this one in a opposite way cuz i wrote a poem on this topic also but it had misery in my day..
anyways...keep writing and never stop posting

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3 posted 2001-04-21 05:32 PM


Hey,

        This a wonderful poem I love the poem! Enough said   until your next poem

               -- Linc

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4 posted 2001-04-21 08:02 PM


Short but sweet. Sometimes I just like to stare at clouds... hehe
nice job

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5 posted 2001-04-21 08:09 PM


that one was short, and nice.  It was just.. nice, lol. I liked it

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6 posted 2001-04-21 09:47 PM


*does the scarlet is so cool and has talent dance* hey hun i loves you sweet raven keep up all the good stuff ok
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7 posted 2001-04-21 09:58 PM


Well done. Short, but that is my preference in being a reader and a writer. I enjoyed this very much.

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8 posted 2001-04-22 02:16 AM


Very nice!  I've written poems like this before.  
Clouds are neat.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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9 posted 2001-04-23 08:59 PM


I enjoyed this!  Nicely done.

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subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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