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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Drunk You just cannot see that the pain runs through my veins, into my head Your driving me insane and I wish that I were dead for all I had was love and I am cold and all alone I looked up high above but I never felt at home the hate left me burning and I burnt out deep inside the world it kept me turning when I began to hide my bones broke the silence and the pain brought me tears I couldn’t stand the violence and neither could my peers I couldn’t see the end it wasn’t in my sight It drove me round the bend as I went searching for the light the tunnel was long and the journey hard I couldn’t belong I was always scarred the long night drew close and the end became near I began and chose to eliminate my fear my heart was empty my mind was full but all the world was silent and the colours became dull <<<_Andrew_>>> " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Great poem grrrr I have to go I will be back on to finish replying in a few min stupid computer  "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Awesome job, Zu! The last line is so excellent, it just weaves the title right into the rest of the poem so eloquently.  Very very nice job.~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was great, Andrew! This one's going into my library.. the way you used the title in the poem was so unique. The flow to this piece was excellent.. this is one to be proud of! Very nicely done! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Oooohh..me liked this a lot. Yep, the ending was superb. Way to go dude! ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this poem. Not as much as some of your others but this did have a lot of feelings in it. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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