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Silver Butterfly
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since 2001-03-13

Posts 42
Between here and the end

0 posted 2001-04-20 10:36 PM

(note: okay, well... for all my comments I suppose it's time for me to add a poem or so. I don't usually do this so everyone be very proud.)

(another note: I wrote this for an intensive study I was in, so it's definatly not the best I've ever written. The assignment was to write a poem from a National Geographic using the detail found in the article. I promise I'll post something mushy some other time.)

It's raining colors
In Dali
And in Japan, tiny porcelin faces
turned upwards
are coated white
while with bare hands crushing
anicent ink sticks
Aristotle chants
"the rainbow is between black and white"
"and somewhere insects are bleeding crimson dye
the color of competeing tomato plants"
it's pouring rainbows in Dali
where Krishna and Radha
are in love

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-04-21 12:09 PM

Welcome to Passions

Very nice first post... I enjoyed it quite a bit! Thanks for the great read, and I can't wait to read more! So keep posting.
Nicely done

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-04-21 12:10 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

I'm glad you've decided to join us
I hope you enjoy this amazing place as we all do
Have fun in sharing your works and reading others too
pls check your email too

Your first post is very intersting
the style is totally different
it makes me very curious
id love to see more of your work
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-04-21 12:31 PM

I'd say "welcome" but that would be silly, you've been here for a while.

To be honest, I did like this poem! The descriptions were simple but effective. Well done!
I can't wait to read more.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-21 02:15 AM

Hey now!
Well I'm sorry but this poem was simply amazing. Regardless of it being a school assignment and about NG....I mean....it's great. It simply is just great!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-21 02:20 AM

nice job on the poem definitly a very good first post

and WELCOME TO PASSIONS

keep writing...

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-21-2001).]

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

6 posted 2001-04-21 02:56 AM

i really liked it i thought it was simple and yet it said stuff good job hun keep it up and welcome i am a newbie to so we can be newboes together ok lol anyway bye bye for now

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-04-23 07:55 PM

Welcome to Passions!!!

Its great that you decided to join us! This was a wonderful first post!! Keep em coming!!

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