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Rach813
Junior Member

since 2001-04-17

Posts 30
Maine

0 posted 2001-04-20 01:21 PM

I walk by you and you look at me,
But a love like ours will never be,
I don't even know your name,
Life without you will never be the same.
There's so many things that I want to say,
But everytime you just walk away,
We'll never be together,
So I'll be dreaming of forever.
Dreaming for the day when you will say,
I will love you in every way,
But I know we will never be,
Together forever, just you and me....

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-20 07:45 PM

Ohh... this one got to me quite a bit... very emotional.
I love what you described here, it's just so sorrowful of a concept. I think, personally, this is the best poem I've read by you. It has a great sense of power.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-04-20 10:44 PM

I really like this. You portrayed a lot of emotion here... enough to make me want to go back and read a few times through. I really like the flow, as well. Much improved from some of the others you've posted today.
I enjoyed the read.
Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-04-20 11:01 PM

I'm just wondering now who this person is. Yes, as the others already have said, you did express so much emotion on this particular piece. very good Rach..... This was an excellent write.

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

MindlessPoet
Member

since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

4 posted 2001-04-21 01:28 AM

I like the poem and the emotion in it. I'm glad I was referred to this site

hehe

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-21 02:03 AM

Wow, this was great. I truly enjoyed this one. VERY good!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-04-21 02:04 AM

emotions were portrayed very good..
this poem is definitly one of ur best...
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Rach813
Junior Member

since 2001-04-17

Posts 30
Maine

7 posted 2001-04-21 10:06 AM

Well writing this poem I had a certain someone that I gave my heart to in mind and all he really did was take my heart and used me! Thats what I was thinking about

Thanks for all the good comments on this poem tho!

Never let someone see you frowning, you never know when someone is falling in love with your smile :)

Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30

Posts 176
Virginia

8 posted 2001-04-21 11:39 AM

I thought that this was sweet. I liked it. Good luck w/ whoever this is written about. I know how it goes too! Anyway, good luck and keep writing!
~ab~

*~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~*

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