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Kosetsu
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0 posted 2001-04-20 07:42 AM


To the angel I adore,
I write these poet’s words,
That she might find the things within,
Upon the songs of birds.

To the angel I adore,
I would give the brightest star,
That I might see her smile,
As it glistens from afar.

To the angel I adore,
I would give the reddest rose,
That she might feel the love,
That my heart bestows.

To the angel I adore,
I will prove my love so true,
Dear Angel of My Heart,
I love you.


"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

© Copyright 2001 Adam Kamerer - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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1 posted 2001-04-20 10:30 AM


I liked this one. I like the style of the poem. Nice job
Jon

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"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

banburycross
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viginia
2 posted 2001-04-20 12:52 PM


The flow was very good in this and i liked the format a lot.  this is really great writing, keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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3 posted 2001-04-20 12:58 PM


This is so beautiful, Kosetsu!  I loved it!  This one's going into my library.  VERY nice job!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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4 posted 2001-04-20 02:34 PM


I don't have words to describe this poem right now.  It was an amazing read.  keep sharing my friend

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

Angel Bee
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5 posted 2001-04-20 05:44 PM


I liked this, it was sweet. :o) Keep writing!
~ab~

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lonely*soul
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6 posted 2001-04-20 05:49 PM


awwww i like this one too..good job!!!

*kim*

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7 posted 2001-04-20 08:16 PM


Gamer Boy is in love!  
Who knew?
Best wishes bro!  You may want to take her out some time, and no most chicks don't go for "Lord of the Rings!"     hehe
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

Kosetsu
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8 posted 2001-04-20 08:18 PM


lol...aww, but she might! Nah, unfortunately, her parents are real strict, and won't let her go out on dates until she's 17. Guess we gotta be content to cuddle in front o' a good TV show. *grins*

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

Isabel Galaxia
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9 posted 2001-04-20 10:13 PM


Wow that was really sweet.  Who says you have to go out to have fun anyway......

Bel

MindlessPoet
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10 posted 2001-04-20 10:37 PM


I like this poem, it's awesome.  Nice style and flow, and esp. content.

*TiMMYBoY*
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11 posted 2001-04-21 01:26 AM


Beautiful poem. I enjoyed this.

~sugarpie313~
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12 posted 2001-04-21 11:44 PM


very nice, i like it sooooooooooooooooooooo much!! mos def goin in my lib.  


Valerie

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13 posted 2001-04-22 01:34 AM


awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
this was soo sweet
i liked it!
hehe..keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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14 posted 2001-04-22 01:37 AM


WOW, GREAT JOB!!!  

2Good
+2Be
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4Gotten

knightlyshadows
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15 posted 2001-04-22 02:27 AM


awwwwwwws *sniff* im addin to me library!
*snuffles ben*
tiff

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"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
16 posted 2001-04-22 03:11 AM


aw this was sweet...i know the ending was cliched and all but what the hey!!!
i loved it anyways.. :
good luck with the girl matey

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it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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17 posted 2001-04-23 08:10 PM


ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!

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