i liked the poem..but u described a situation that i hope u haven't gone thru..i feel bad that so many gurls has been or go thru this kind of thing but if u did also i'm very sorry to hear as i wish the best for u...
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
I really like the form, I thought it was original. In fact, I thought it was brilliant... maybe rewrite it with a rhyme scheme as well. I think it would look marvelous if, in each stanza, the three lines to precede the ending word all rhymed with one another. Well done. ~Allan
Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. ~Unknown
swimming in fairy floss.......
thanx for your comments guys..its helps a lot. i cant believe you liked my format!!..heheh..i thought that that was one of my fallouts...but yeah i dont know how to ryhme my poems very well...i sorta just talk my way through them. unfortunately i have to say that i HAVE been through it...but yes i have put it all behind me now..im ok javvie and AA..thanx for asking..
"Life is not long and boring, it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-
The Great Land DownUnder
Bebe, This is really horrific! It makes me angry with a certain someone very much indeed. If you need to talk a bit more you know where to find me babe. About the poem-it made me too angry to actually like it.