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jytree
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0 posted 2001-04-20 01:29 AM



Within life I find death,
A million broken hearts placed upon my chest,
All is sad no hope to give,
I join them soon was my life a fib?,

Gone are the day that I loved so dear,
Yet with my life I just perveser,
Just a life less carcuss for the world to see,
And all I wanted was just to have her near me,

Bell stricked the deathly toll,
Off into hell my tormented body goes,
Never again to see the early light,
Gone are the day within wrong and right,

Endless days that I stay,
Hellish torment day until day,
Never really a consept of time,
Just endless suriffing Forever.

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



© Copyright 2001 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
jytree
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1 posted 2001-04-20 01:31 AM


I hope that you can like this because unitl I can get things going my was this is abou the best I can come up with.
I really don't know what the future holds for me I do know that I am trying to join the National Guards at the end of this month so wish me luck you'all

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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2 posted 2001-04-20 02:34 AM


Good luck in joining the NG!
Good poem to....me likes.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

knightlyshadows
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3 posted 2001-04-20 10:41 AM


*hugs mike* good luck hun!!! and nice i liked it muchs. tiff
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4 posted 2001-04-20 01:27 PM


Wow.. I guess all I can say is good luck.  I wish you the best... Very nice poem.  I enjoyed it very much.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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5 posted 2001-04-20 07:51 PM


Malinda tells me you're huge (like a tree!), so you'll do fine.  hehe    Go kick some fanny, bro.  
As for the poem, watch that spelling.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

jytree
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6 posted 2001-04-20 08:20 PM


thanks everyone it will be hard for me I know but I will do it I belive and alan yes she is right I am like 6"10 or around there take it easy

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel



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