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My Oath
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My Oath |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“ My Oath” Upon my heart My soul My blade this oath I give to you this day Upon my Heart My heart I give I swear to you Endless love Forever and always Upon my Soul My soul is yours You command my life My eternal eternal being With this you may do as you like Upon my Blade My blade is at your service I will protect you with my life No harm shall ever come your way For I will sacrifice it all to keep you safe My Promise This promise I give Forever do I swear Never shall you worry For I shall always be there Even if you never know… It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
WOW i loved this one!!! such respect! awsome job and i hope you posts lots more soon!! great read *KiMiE* " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow... I loved this... you have a great format... repeating the first stanza line by line... Great Job... Keep on posting. <<<_Andrew_>>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Great job. I liked the style of the poem. Keep posting! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
*Applauds* VERY nicely done! I love the format and style.. the flow is very good... wow. This one's going into the library. Nice job! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
This was good. :o) Keep writing!! ~ab~ *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Wowsers!! this is beautifully written, i like this one a lot. i had chills from reading this, definetely a piece for my library. great job, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem. I see you adore the medievil times....I liked the poem. The last line really hit me hard. Great job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Thanks all of you for your replies. as i have said before your comments mean a lot to me. and yes dopey i do love the medievil times. but i am also obsessed with other time periods as well... you will see what i mean in time. thanks again all of you for your replies It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Marvelous work my friend This is really a good read Glad I came back for this one Thanks for the beautiful read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like the last line. Kinda makes it seem like you have the freedom to take vacation any time you want and just say "I was there, you just never knew." Ah well, maybe I'm just that kinda person.  Very nice job still! A creative idea for a poem. Good work! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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