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branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

0 posted 2001-04-18 10:36 PM

My friend pick up your head,
Come lay beside me on this bead,
We will talk about all the times we've shared,
Even now im not on this earth I know im in your head,
Dont worry I didnt mean to hurt you,
Me, well im with my dad up here you see,
Dont blame yourself,
Dont blame me,
Blame the demon that lived with me,
Blame the fact that I couldnt sleep,
All I want now is for you to let your soul free,
Dont hold back my friend,
Ive watched you for years,
Open your heart and open your mind,
Think of me and let you heart untwine,
This is charlie speaking to you,
Dont ever let me down,
Dont ever hold back,
You were my brother when I lived on earth,
Together forever,
In heart,
In mind,
In spirt,
And most of all my brother IN LOVE!!!!

Tell me how u guys like this.....It made me cry when i wrote it......This was my dream lastnight.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

1 posted 2001-04-18 10:41 PM

Obviously very sentimental to you. What can I say? I like this poem. Simple as that, four common words.

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
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branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

2 posted 2001-04-18 10:51 PM

Hey thanks this is in my head...The best poem ive ever written NOT because it ryhmes or sounds good but because...Its written for the person i love the most thanks for the reply

The person i loved the most has left me, now all i got are u guys here. Thanks for the support.
*Tears of love*
*Tears of faith*
*Never any Tears

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

3 posted 2001-04-18 11:06 PM

Hey, this poem is great. It shows your pure emotions from your words.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-19 03:16 AM

I enjoyed this poem. The best poem I ever wrote with emotional quality was a poem I wrote in '98 about my friend who died. Yep yep.....some messed up stuff.
Hope things get better for you pal

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

5 posted 2001-04-19 08:09 AM

               WOW

hey hun, this has got to be your best yet...must be very sentimental for you!  :::hugs:::  great poem!!!!

       *KiMmIe*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

6 posted 2001-04-19 09:13 AM

I have to agree withjust about everyone else. Pause with me and say

WOW

This one obviously means a lot to you, and I thought it was wonderful. Keep it up.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-04-19 09:18 AM

This is a very good poem you've written. It's a very emotional one.. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Angel Bee
Member

since 2001-01-30

Posts 176
Virginia

8 posted 2001-04-19 10:07 AM

i thought it was good. very odd dream. hehe. anyway, keep writing! :o)
~ab~

*~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~*

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

9 posted 2001-04-19 11:45 AM

It's nice to see your poetry becoming steadily more emotional and serious. I remember this stage in my poetic developement, the transition from light-hearted poetry to more deep and emotional poetry, even the sort that makes you cry to write.
I think your development as a writer is very evident in this piece. Well done, Branden!

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

10 posted 2001-04-19 12:48 PM

i think that the most beautiful writing is that which the author really pours himslf into, and you really put a lot of yourself into this piece. this is beautiful writing, keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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