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Sabriel.s.h.lover
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0 posted 2001-04-18 06:05 PM



Hold me close,
Don't let me go.
For if you do,
I'll never be the same.
I feel so safe,
Here in your arms,
Please don't make me leave,
Please......just hold me tight.....

It's short, but it kinda just came to me.

© Copyright 2001 Angelina - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-18 06:23 PM


yes it was short, but it shows the need you want to expressed real well.  great job on this one.

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)
2 posted 2001-04-18 07:19 PM


hey i liked this poem..and yeah it was short, but i know the feeling that you never wanna let o and you want a moment to last forever (actully i just posted a poem bout one of those  hehe)  but good job..hope i see more of your work!!!
        <3   *~KiMmIe~*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30
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Virginia
3 posted 2001-04-18 07:24 PM


I really liked this one. I can really very well!  ) Keep writing!
~AB~

Angel Bee
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4 posted 2001-04-18 07:24 PM


I really liked this one. I can relate very well!   ) Keep writing!
~AB~

*~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~*

oops double post sorry!

[This message has been edited by Angel Bee (edited 04-18-2001).]

Low Man's Lyric
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In a dream
5 posted 2001-04-18 07:25 PM


Short and sweet. Thanks for sharing.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."  
~Anonymous

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6 posted 2001-04-19 03:10 AM


Wondeful. Very pure write here.
I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
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viginia
7 posted 2001-04-19 09:50 AM


You did a wonderful job expressing yourself in a very few words, something that is difficult to do.  i liked this a lot, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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8 posted 2001-04-19 09:54 AM


This is a powerful poem in it's simplicity.  I liked it a lot... Very nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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