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Heavens Tears
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0 posted 2001-04-18 11:20 AM


I thought that I had a mother
Because she always said she loved me
But not once did she have the actions
To back up the words.
She left me for someone,
Who she'd never admit she loved more
But she did
And as soon as he was gone
She wanted a daughter again
But theres a difference between having a daughter
And being a mother.

I dont want to sit and wait for you to change any longer
Partially because I'm tired of waiting
But mostly because I am scared
Scared that the drugs and alcohol arent what made you this way.
Scared of what you really are.
Scared of the mother I never had.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

© Copyright 2001 Heavens Tears - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-18 01:22 PM


this is a really powerful poem, i think it's the best that i've read by you.  you did a really beautiful job on this, it is really well written.  this one goes into my library and i look forward to reading lots more in the future.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Hand Me Down
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2 posted 2001-04-18 01:27 PM


This poem is so deep and beautiful. I really liked it.

"Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose"

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3 posted 2001-04-18 02:13 PM


Wow...yeah this one was powerful...man...great job getting it into a poem, it was great..Thanks for postin...Have a smiley day.  
  ~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

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4 posted 2001-04-18 02:14 PM


Grrr...so sowwy for the double...
Here! To make it worthwhile...These things are the best!!




There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

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5 posted 2001-04-19 02:25 AM


Very sad poem.  I'm sorry you went through this. *hugs*

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-04-19 10:46 AM


This is such a sad poem.  I hope things have been fized as of now, and if they haven't then, I'll just offer you many *hugs*
Nicely dont here.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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7 posted 2001-04-19 12:06 PM


*click, clack*  Carly's right... those things are the best... *stares for hours*
ahem... that is...
Great job, Heavens Tears.  This poem has an immense amount of power, although I found that the format was a bit lacking.  Still I appreciate the fact that this was written to express and not impress, so I'll still commend you on a job well done.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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8 posted 2001-04-19 12:14 PM


i wish for you.....peace and strength.
Angel Bee
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9 posted 2001-04-19 02:52 PM


I'm sorry your mom is that way. I hope it gets better. :o) Keep writing!!
~ab~

*~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~*

Meggie1986
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10 posted 2001-05-22 11:33 PM


You truely showed your feeling in this poem, which makes it come alive.  I'm sorry things are not so great between you an your mother, and I hope that putting it down on paper can help.
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11 posted 2001-05-23 01:31 AM


i loved this poem...cuz i went thru similar situation well exact to say as they opposite...i relate to this poem by heart...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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