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Jess714
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since 2001-04-17
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0 posted 2001-04-17 09:30 PM


Mangos and strawberries could never be like you on the lake
For you are soft, sweet, and innocent just like on the lake
You aren't like the rest
You aren't fake

Mangos and strawberries take no remorse
For they listen and take the course
For they are the horse on the force
They don't know how to take the worst
Unlike you who takes the pain to no extreme

[This message has been edited by Jess714 (edited 04-18-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-04-17 09:33 PM


Welcome to Passions Jess!
I enjoyed this very much. I found this read to be quite interesting. I hope to see you post more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-04-17 10:35 PM


   Welcome!  

Great first post and I'm excited to read more. Check your e-mail for a special message. Hope you enjoy it here!

*dq


-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

[This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 04-17-2001).]

lonely*soul
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3 posted 2001-04-17 11:06 PM


welcome to passions (seems like alot of ppl have joined tongiht)  neways i liked the poem, it was cute, and it was written well
         <3  *~KiM~*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

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4 posted 2001-04-17 11:20 PM


Welcome to Passions!  

This is a very good first post.  I enjoyed reading this, and I'm looking forward to reading more.  Oh, and there's a spelling error in the title.  You're and Your is always a commonly misspelled word.  
Anyway, I know you'll like it here     Welcome!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

[This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 04-18-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-04-18 12:14 PM


Welcome to Passions!!! Im so glad you decided to join us!! This was a very interesting and intruiging first piece! I cant wait to see more from you  
banburycross
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viginia
6 posted 2001-04-18 11:38 AM


Welcome to passions!!  i really enjoyed this poem, you have a really interesting style and i am really looking forward to reading more of your work in the future.  i'm glad you've decided to join us, i know you'll like it here  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Ina
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7 posted 2001-04-18 11:49 AM


i adore mango an strawberries...yum

this was a great first post. I hope to see more from you.

Welcome!
Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

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8 posted 2001-04-18 12:58 PM


Mmmm..... yummy.     I really like the comparison you created in this poem, very creative.  
Welcome to Passions in Poetry!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

Hand Me Down
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9 posted 2001-04-18 01:11 PM


Welcome! I really liked this and I hope ro see some more post soon...........yum, strawberries

"Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose"

Rach813
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10 posted 2001-04-18 02:30 PM


Hey Sis! You know I love that poem and I told you to keep writing them! Kepp up the GREAT work! I love ya!

Love Ya Sis!!
Rachel

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11 posted 2001-04-18 05:15 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Glad to see you've joined us here in Passions for Poetry.  
Hope you enjoy reading and sharing as well

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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12 posted 2001-04-18 05:20 PM


Welcome to Passions!  Your poem was good, you used an interesting topic.  Keep posting!

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Sabriel.s.h.lover
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13 posted 2001-04-18 05:36 PM


Welcome and enjoy!!! This poem was nice. Nuff said.
sabriel

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