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Hand Me Down Junior Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 32WV |
Mind reeling I fall back Into this vortex I collapse Fall to my knees begin to pray Memories come crashing down now I cry to GOD, and he brings the rain That washes away all this pain I'm getting better now, growing older Day by day, these memories fade But just as my conscience starts to clear I drag the rivers, your still there The way I bring you down Could not compare As if it wasn't hard enough You've got to make it so much harder In another world I could learn to forget But till then I'm here Making room for new regrets. "Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose" |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Excellent poem! I am honored to be the first to reply! I havent read many of your poems, but I really like this one! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Oooohhh very nice here....how bout Vortex of Regret? Hmm...well keep up the very good work...can't wait for more... ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Wow good poem, keep em coming. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Very impressive...a strong, meaningful ending to an already good poem.  "...if you want love you must be love.." |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Beautiful writing, my friend. We all get like this sometimes, and you describe it really well. Your writing improves each time you post (not that you need it), and it's a joy to read everything you write. I just wish you were able to share more. Thanks for this one!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a very nicely written piece you have here, Hand Me Down. Good job... I'm looking forward to seeing more. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this very much. Quite the poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
niceee....i really liked this one.. also keep writing  |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
I really liked this poem its the first one I've read of yours because I'm a new member but I hope to be reading more in the very short future! I liked the deep words which you used to give the poem a gloomy feel! Very interesting! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Great ending to this one, i like this poem a lot. you have a lot of talent so i hope you keep writing and posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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