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xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2001-04-17 12:07 PM

To some im a fable,
Something close to a myth.
I've been touched,
But not by a fingers tip.

People have heard of me,
Some may have seen.
Others i see every day,
A few i star in their dreams.

A couple know im real,
Some dont know if im a lie.
An imaginary image,
Another thought thats denied.

Kept away in your voice,
Depending on who your speaking to.
I sit there and stare trying to understand,
Theres nothing i can do.

Its as if im invisible,
Unsuspected by the naked eye.
To those who are trained,
To pass me by.

Lost control,
In the name of love.
Invisible or well seen,
It depends on who we're talking of.

I choke on your smile,
With your devious stare.
While you decide,
Wether or not im there...

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-04-17 12:47 PM

Michele -! nice job.i liked it. even though it was a little different but still interesting.keep writin

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

2 posted 2001-04-17 07:04 AM

this is good! i like it
~kate

'Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.'

Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

3 posted 2001-04-17 09:35 AM

"An imaginary image
Another thought thats denied"
This is a great quote because most thoughts are denied because subconciousley we usually think about things that could not happen in reality! This poem really made me think and I enjoyed it very much! Carry on inspiring people!

Truly appreciative
^*~Kicking Kim~*^

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

4 posted 2001-04-17 12:32 PM

Hey,

This is a great poem. I liked the style or format of the poem it was nice. Keep it up and until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-17 09:36 PM

I like the part about choking on a smile. That line was truly genius. I loved it.
Very well done shugar.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Dana Samples
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since 2001-04-07

Posts 68

6 posted 2001-04-17 09:42 PM

VERY well done!! i think that you have a lot of talent. i really like the way it was writen.

lots of love, dana

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

7 posted 2001-04-17 10:43 PM

hey Michi

(new nickname haha) Neways..this must be the poem you were finishing the other night. Wonderful, your poetry gets better with every poem you write. I love all these little inspirational things you sneak into your poems now, great job. Can't wait till the next one so get busy

L8er chick*

dq

-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-05-10 10:50 PM

hmmmmmmm......
that's a hard situation
just don't try to figure it out too much though
it'll drive you crazy
good write
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

9 posted 2001-05-11 09:49 AM

I'm really sorry that i missed this the first time around, i really like this piece. the last stanza was especially well written and i got chills after reading it. you did a wonderful job on this, keep psoting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

10 posted 2001-05-11 11:25 AM

hey i liked this one alots. everything bouts it i likeds! *hugs* cant wait to c mores.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

11 posted 2001-05-11 05:23 PM

Good job on the poem. I like the format of it, overall it complimented the poem beautifully. Well chosen.

Very powerful wordings as well... this has a definite impact.
Well done indeed.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

12 posted 2001-05-11 11:55 PM

Thank you very much everyone

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