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Kicking Kim
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0 posted 2001-04-16 05:30 PM


Where Angels Belong


The sky opens,
it speaks wise words of the stars.
Utopia can be seen,
a whirlwind of thoughts are thrown from above,
crashing down into a whilring vortex of nothing.

Such valuable language,
says nothing of interest to me.
The philosophical meanings,
are just trapped thoughts longing to be free.
Empty, foreign, nothing to understand,
very wise words in another land.

A single leaf falls from a tree,
following the echo from the message to me.
Floating high above the stars.
In search of the meaning,
of the message,
to this visit.


© Copyright 2001 Kimberley Mason - All Rights Reserved
DancinQueen
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1 posted 2001-04-16 11:00 PM


Welcome!      We're glad to have you. Hope you enjoy it here. This was very refreshing, keep up the great work.

--Check your email, also  

*dq


-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

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Hand Me Down
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2 posted 2001-04-16 11:10 PM


I loved this poem, cant wait to see more

"Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose"

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3 posted 2001-04-16 11:12 PM


Welcome to Passions!  

I really like this first post.  The descriptions are beautiful.  I can't wait to read more.  Keep writing, sharing, replying, and posting.  
Nicely done

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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4 posted 2001-04-16 11:27 PM


Welcome to passions!!!! I hope that you like it here just as much as the rest of us!! Great first post and i cant wait to see more from you!! Welcome!!

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5 posted 2001-04-17 03:57 AM


Oh wow this completely rocked. SO deep and thought-provoking.
This poem was written VERY well. I enjoyed this completely!
Welcome to Passions!
Hope to see more

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-04-17 09:29 AM


Welcome to Passions... I hope you enjoy your time here like the rest of us do... Great poem, I thought that it was well written so keep up the good work. It's also nice to see someone else from England. So until your next poem.

<<<_ Andrew _>>>

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

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7 posted 2001-04-17 12:36 PM


Hey,

      Welcome to Passions great start   hope to see more. Now this is the place where I would say "Until your next poem" but since someone already said my line   haha oh well

           -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

banburycross
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viginia
8 posted 2001-04-17 02:55 PM


Welcome to passions!!  this is a really great first post, you did a very excellent job on it.  i look forward to reading lots more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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9 posted 2001-04-17 03:01 PM


Great job!  I really liked this one!  I guess everyone here is getting better, b/c I have seen so many really good poems floating around here lately!

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

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10 posted 2001-04-17 03:10 PM


Hiya hiya hiya! Welcome to our world. This is a great poem..I enjoyed it lots.   Keep writing!!
  ~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

Sabriel.s.h.lover
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11 posted 2001-04-17 04:42 PM


This poem rocked! Hope to see more from you.
Attack Ferrit
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12 posted 2001-04-17 09:18 PM


welcome to passions. great first post. cant wait to read more of your stuff.

everything is skin deep

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13 posted 2001-04-17 09:24 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Nice to see you 've decided to join us here in passions for poetry.  hope you do enjoy reading and sharing as well.  I loved your poe, as you have impressed me already with your talent in writing.  I hope to see more in the future  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

Allan Riverwood
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14 posted 2001-04-18 12:56 PM


Very good job on this poem!  I think it was very thought provoking, the rhymes were well-placed and it really seems like a poem that you would recite aloud with ease, without any definite rhythm.  Some poems don't really need rhythm, and this one is one of those poems that works fine because of the sentiments.     I do like this a great deal, I wouldn't change a thing about it!
Welcome to Passions in Poetry!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

Bishop
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15 posted 2001-04-22 11:24 AM


Very Very good.  It reminds me of my girlfriend and I.  I think that u value love and see where you coming from with this poem.  Keep writing

^*Bishop*^

Bishop
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16 posted 2001-04-22 01:41 PM


Could u plz look at my poem, "Terminal Disease".  Thx a lot

^*Bishop*^

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