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Heavens Tears
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0 posted 2001-04-16 11:52 AM


My life isnt perfect
I'm still working on that
Chasing all the monsters out of my closet
All the goblins out from under my bed.
Still steadily crying for everything I have lost
Friends
A childhood
A mother

Still trying to have a good relationship with those who have been there for me
All the while wondering if I am too late
If I did take my head out from under my pillow in time to start changing
But only time will tell...

My life can be no more than a work in progress
But isnt that the point?
To spend all those years working towards perfection
Only to discover it doesnt exist?
Or does it?
Can you just not see it
Till you've lost it
Trying to find it?
And then,
Once its gone
Can you ever get it back?

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

© Copyright 2001 Heavens Tears - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-16 02:41 PM


I was drawn to your poem as I have written one under the same title... I'm glad I read it as I thought it was great... Keep on posting

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

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2 posted 2001-04-16 02:52 PM


This was great. all our lives r works in progress.

Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

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3 posted 2001-04-16 06:18 PM


I liked the idea of this poem. Well done! Oh and it's never too late to appreciate people, rekindle a friendship, work out your life, and so on.....never too late....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-04-16 07:58 PM


Javi's right.  It's never too late..
Very nicely done here, Heavens.  I really enjoyed this read.. Thanks for sharing.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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5 posted 2001-04-16 09:24 PM


Hey,
  
          Great poem   until your next ( not much left to say they have already said what I have  

                     -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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6 posted 2001-04-16 09:55 PM


omg i love this! i so relate, because i think along the same lines of everything that you express in this. but, blah blah blah good work! LOL


Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

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7 posted 2001-04-17 01:01 PM


i really like this poem, and i especially like the way you ended the first stanza.  this is wonderful writing, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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