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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Visions” Visions glaring Blinding forth Images of what was, is, and yet to come I see I feel What is this before me? is any of it real? In wonder I gape As I see these visions These clairvoyant scenes, unravaling before me Waiting and watching So much of it comes true I stand in the corner not knowing what to do Actions I do not take In these things I see Simply because how can it be? It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (edited 04-15-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Interesting indeed! The second stanza was very well organized, I think perhaps the third stanza should have been a bit more similar to it, like "In wonder I gape" being two seperate lines. "In wonder I gape" Like that... and progressively onward. Great job on this one still. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
i like this it's good. i like the form of it and the way it reads. well done, keep it up ~kate 'Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.' |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i like this one..especially the format...it suited the whole "visions" theme.good work!! "Life is not long and boring, |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The style and format of this poem was excellent! I really liked the way it flowed.. Very nicely done  --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job here. I liked this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
The style and the format was great... I really enjoyed the theme... good work. <<_ Andrew _>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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