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Alone at the Cafe

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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 04-15-2001 02:56 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Sadistic fairy on my shoulder,
Saying, "Girl have you ever thought of
turning over the ashtray
and giving some new wheels a spin?"
But I just sing to myself
to avoid my agreeing shrug
She says, "Ain't it kind of funny
how you spend your whole life
wanting to fit in with everyone else
only to find that you can't.
And when you finally accept that you're odd,
you realize that
you're really not different at all."
Looking back on my life,
I know how true that is
"Yeah so I'm bisexual
and I don't believe in any god.
I laugh at people
when they stare at me as I walk.
But we're only excluded
because we make it so,"
Laughing at myself thinking
that there's also some people
that you just have to dislike or even hate.
Then she says, "You keep walking, girl.
Walking to hide from yourself."
"No, your wrong," I said smiling,
"I never walk to hide, but to find."


I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too.  

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 04-15-2001).]

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1 posted 04-15-2001 03:04 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

I could relate to this one a lot.  It's good that you are willing to accept these things about yourself, and let the whole world know them.  Laughing at those who give you odd looks is an approach that I take often.     
The last line is very good, the sentiments are excellent.  Well done, Jaime.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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2 posted 04-15-2001 04:12 PM       View Profile for LoneWolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoneWolf

I like this one A LOT. Really relate to what your saying here.

"But we're only excluded
because we make it so"

i liked that and the last line a whole lot. well great poem can't wait to see more from ya

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

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3 posted 04-15-2001 05:12 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

"I never walk to hide, but to find."

I like that line a while lot.  You have a great attitude about it.  Keep laughin  

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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4 posted 04-16-2001 03:24 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Great job. I liked this one.  Thought you did well. Very good message within the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

katherine
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5 posted 04-16-2001 07:41 AM       View Profile for katherine   Email katherine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for katherine

this is awesome! well done.
keep it up and keep laughing!
~kate

'Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.'

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6 posted 03-20-2002 03:49 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

And when you finally accept that you're odd,
you realize that
you're really not different at all."

In your poems, as in our chats, the truths that come up to the sruface and say "see me you [edit] idiot... pay attention!" are always good to do so with.

"No, your wrong," I said smiling,
"I never walk to hide, but to find."

I could be you here, you could be me here... oh wait... hmm... you could be you... hmmm... you are you. Basically, I could be you in these lines.

Saying, "Girl have you ever thought of
turning over the ashtray
and giving some new wheels a spin?"

What do you mean by these lines?

Sincerely,
Mon Verite

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

paper doll
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7 posted 09-02-2002 09:33 AM       View Profile for paper doll   Email paper doll   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paper doll

Ahh this is fantastic. I love the message behind this. People are idiots. They have been since the dawn of time and will continue to be so. I could relate to this 100%.

You write so well, Jaime. Very impressed here.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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